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    dots Submission Name: Anniversarydots
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    Author: smlaw
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 56/37/10
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
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    Bytes: 1438



    Description:
       just me typing to get myself closeur and get something out of my system (b/c after a year i still don't have as much as i'd like).

    Feel free to read, but i'd prefer nobody comment.

    Thanks,
    Sean


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    dotsAnniversarydots
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    You left me at age 8.
    You turned your back on me,
    on all of us.
    It took a while but I got over it.
    I grew stronger and tougher.

    I got over the pain,
    was fine.
    I didn't sit up at night thinking of you,
    of why?
    or how?
    I didn't want to comprehend what you had done;
    I couldn't.

    Ten years later it all came down.
    Cancer
    four kinds.
    It looked like you in the bed
    at least the face.....
    Your face, a skeleton body.

    A week later you died.
    You refused to eat,
    you gave up,
    you quit,
    just like you had before on us.

    You walked out on us,
    my parents
    my brothers
    me.
    We came back in your time of need;
    you quit again.

    I'll always remember when you died.
    The news;
    Crying in school;
    My anger.

    So many questions left unanswered.
    But you made me a better person,
    you helped me realize how to live my life
    how to treat others
    who i wanted to be.

    Its been almost a year since you died now,
    and i'm off at college.
    I won't be home for the aniversary,
    but the next time i am
    i'll bring you a lily.
    Because by leaving me
    you helped me be who i am today.....




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      I know you dont want comments but kick me in the balls if you like, I am gonna have to give ya at least one on how inspirational this is to me. Cancer is a part of my family tree and I am pretty sure it will someday take me if I dont get in a devastating car accident before then.

    Then ya gotta throw in the whole "someone who is loved in some fashion yet pushes those that truly love them away" concept into it and thats a whole other topic for discussion. Followed by the being a better person from tragedy situations that are all too common. Good stuff maynard. I dont know if this is a comment or just a cheap arse understanding type of retort, but like I said, kick me in the balls if'n ya want...it was a great, heartfelt write. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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