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    dots Submission Name: Food Fetishdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       At times, love doesn't work out the way we expect. Still the dreams live on.


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    dotsFood Fetishdots
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    What's left is not fit for leftovers.
    The once crisp allure is oily and limp.
    She greets the day like lips licking
    salt from a cold french-fry.

    She is run down by drive-through love.
    Cheap romance is difficult to digest.
    The entree she enjoyed is gone
    except for the lump in her stomach.

    She wants crystal goblet prisms
    refracting candle flames preceding
    the slow deliberate devouring of
    a decadent chocolate dessert.

    Still, her unspoken sensual passion
    and daydream is breakfast in bed
    brought hot and steaming.
    She guesses it is all a food fetish.




    Submitted on 2005-10-07 06:15:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Do I like this
    Describing Love as food is perfect
    This write fits so well together
    Excellent use of words
    Great write Chrystine
    Take Care
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting perspective. Love and food, two basic necessities and yet not too many people seem to think to make a connection. I congratulate you on this. I like the way you've done the poem, in another's hands it could have ended horribly
    She greets the day like lips licking
    salt from a cold french-fry.
    Love that part
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Cat | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem was highly creative, and i liked the whole french fry thing. it fit in well with the piece, and i thought that you were very descriptive in describing the obsession or fetish.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how you used food to express your want of a relationship. very nice. you seem to be a very creative writer and i love that you share that with us. i love reading poems that are different from the same ol' thing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Sweets | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i like how you're able to portray the want of love, and movement from one relationship to another through food. its very interesting and really gives some great images. i really enjoyed the second stanza and its line "cheap romance is difficult to digest".

    great work, can't wait to see more.

    ~smlaw
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by smlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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