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    dots Submission Name: The one I loveddots

    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This poem was about when my ex-girlfriend and I were deep in to a relationship but then she cheated on me for my younger cousin!!!!

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    dotsThe one I loveddots

    She's gone forever,
    and a day and many more
    She left as though she
    didn't care about us

    The things we shared
    gone and shattered like she did my heart
    My dreams of us are
    now torn apart

    I loved her with my whole self
    what did I do to make her go
    My entire world is just now
    bitterly cold

    The brightness of her face
    and every step I wanted to feel her grace
    Never thinking that we would
    be apart
    Now here I am with a broken heart

    She cheated as well as lied to me
    I was to blinded by love to step up and see
    The things that were done
    are just the dust with the wind

    Have I ever lived to deserve such a fate
    Never will I let anyone in to my love gate

    If you have ever fell in love make sure it's love not lust!

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      mmm I like this but just my opinion about the topic. I feel you shouldn't give up and you should allow someone back into your heart just make it when the time is write for you, make yourself #1 and them #2! yes its good to have another in your life and love them but you need to accpect yourself you need to "love" yourself and I'm last to say this because one it sounds so stupid and I'm simply not one to say this but you have poor your heart out to us and I feel... no I want to reassure you things will work out. Everything happends for a reason and you eventually you will find your wife and you will love her more than this ex. As hard as this maybe to see its there. And really thanks to this ex you'll find your future wife rather being with someone who was betraying you.

    Good luck
    | Posted on 2009-07-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude I am sorry...things like this just happen and when they do you have to be prepared for it, I think that this poem accurately demonstrates your feelings and you do a good job with the emotion here.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I am going through the same thing in a way right now, my ex broke my heart and left me for someone else, but i found someone 10 times better then he was to be so im sure it will happen for you too. but i think you did an excellent job saying what you wanted to say. My favorite part in the whole poem is when you said that you were too blind to step up and see because its so true when you love someone you have blinders on and everyone around you can see whats happening but you. Good luck and keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this even though its a little clich. i will tell you what i tell everyone. add more personal things. specifics like the way she smelled or the color of her eyes.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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