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    dots Submission Name: Because of Herdots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       After a whirlwind year of meeting my wife, divorcing an ex-wife and finally complete happiness, she still spurs my creative side. The love poetry I write for her isn't influenced by her, it is for her and because of her.
    Hope this isn't too vague

    your friend
    ben


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    dotsBecause of Herdots
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    For so long of my breath, I exist
    For so long of my existence, you cause
    For so long from your cause, I love
    For so long of my love, you remain

    With bursting heart of my joy, I grow
    With bursting heart of my growth, you influence
    With bursting heart of your influence, I’m humbled
    With bursting heart of my humbleness, you compel

    Through passion of my soul, I awake
    Through passion of my awakening, you provide
    Through passion of your provisions, I indulge
    Through passion of my indulgence, you moderate

    Of my eyes reopened, I see
    Of my ears unblocked, I hear
    Of my heart unburdened, I blossom
    Of my essence released, I pray




    Submitted on 2005-10-07 09:14:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi Ben,
    This is very sweet and a cool anthem to your lady. It' s very straight-forward and easy to see how much you love this woman who is the love of your life.

    Our mates should inspire us and if she does, you're so very lucky. I like the last stanza best, because it puts me in the mind that you've found your soul mate..

    without your saying so, you love her beyond words..
    thanks for sharing, great job.

    peace,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite beautiful and creatively different!

    I like how each line incorparates the line before.
    This is a love poem that avoids clichés and an overly sentamentalism. The repitition works well and adds power to the verses.

    An amazing job!!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS REALLY GOOD POEM YOU SAY ALOT OF THE SAME THINGS THOUGH AND I BELIEVE YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE CREATIVE AND BELIVE MY MISTY_OF_MOON ALWAYS TOLD ME STRAIT UP
    SO TRIE THIS OUT A/ND TELL ME LATER
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by shygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem for the woman you love. I like the style you use here carrying each dominant word from the previous line into the next line and so on...This really does a wonderful job of expressing sincere and profound appreciation, gratitude and love for an obviously priceless woman. I am sure she is honored by these words. This is really beautiful and it is always wonderful to read a poem of love such as this. Lovely! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      What a warm, loving, emotional poem to the love of your life. You express your feelings for her here so very well. ! How lucky this lady is to feel such love! You show here she has your full attention. A very touching poem and well written.
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Tif.. "suave" is right. This is a lovely proclamation of what falling in love can do for your heart. Living waters bursting into joy and fulfillment. Finding your soulmate and being happy. I'm happy for you both, and wish you many moons of bliss.
    This was most enjoyable to read.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is simply phenomonal. It gave me tingly feelings all over. I love it.

    This has such passion; it's beautiful.
    It feels smooth and slick.

    Good job my friend.

    Hopefully,
    Darin
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya ole' southern suave gentleman and romantic! I'm so happy for you both and for your complete family! It's what Life is all about - LOVE. That is so important to have someone that is your muse and encourages you and you encourage her and that she intoxicates and enhances your senses and your life!
    Good for you! I know she appreciates you for who you are and what you help each other to be.
    Happy Friday and blessed weekend!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      its very nice that you achieved a certain growth after meeting your wife. I am happy for you and that you were positively influenced, and yet humbled by a great blessing
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]


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