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    dots Submission Name: Sorry sweetydots
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    Author: bloodwing
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 453/512/118
    Words: 347
    Class/Type: Rant/Betrayal
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    dotsSorry sweetydots
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    Passion fuels desire.
    I am such a sucker.

    He was my best friend
    she cut me down.

    Thanks, Nick
    Thanks, Hillary

    I am passionate and I am sorry and I am only a wishful thinker.

    "So cut my writst and black my eyes so I can fall asleep tonight or die."
    I'm not fine.

    Give me something to keep me awake.
    I am thriving on apology and digging for enlightenment.

    He's sorry
    I'm sorry
    We're all sorry.

    You were my best friend.

    "On your way home, you should have known
    You never listen to me."

    "I'm not so sure if I'm sure of anything anymore.
    And this is the last night you'll be keeping secrets from me.
    You're so guilty it's disgusting. He's been underneath your sheets, and your hands in places that they probobly shouldn't go,
    but don't worry sweety, I already know."

    I'll steal words to express something more clearly .

    I am at fault.
    You are in the wrong
    I am in the wrong
    we are in the wrong.

    Times fading so quickly. Our hearts won't start beating again until this passes. I won't be able to breathe until I find away around this.

    I'll find a way around this, I always do.
    You know how I do.

    I'll fade so quickly.
    "Etched with marks, but I can deal.
    But you're the problem, and you can't feel...
    ...Today I'm fine without
    Runaway this time without you.
    And all I ever thought you'd be
    That face is tearing holes in me again..."

    This won't make sense.

    You know that we can't win.
    You know I won't win this game.

    I passionate, and I am here.
    I hope he's happy
    I hope she's happy
    I hope they're happy.

    I hope you're as happy as you're pretending.

    I don't care
    I don't care
    I care so much more than I let on.

    I'm not fine
    You're not okay

    He's sorry
    I'm sorry
    You're sorry

    Sorry




    Submitted on 2005-10-07 12:50:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      [censored] kid, that's a tough one. pushing back sheets and find clues about deeds.
    so many seeds.
    i like this one, how you wern't hampered by form or style, let it flow as rant and speak as childeren as the crow calls.

    strangeling
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by strangeling | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this. It seems like something that would only make complete sense to the people involved. Unfortunatly, things like this happen, and the wrong-doers could care less. But you're better off not having people like that in your life, even though its sooooo hard to deal with. This was an overall good write, with great emotion that I can relate to.

    C.ME
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by CompletelyME | [ Reply to This ]
      it is a sad one? your gf cheat on you with your bff?
    life goes on man. idk what to say, cuz i don't belive in love dude. well, hope life gets better i guess...
    overall writing-wise not that great, but it's hard to keep it going smooth when you are writing about something that happened
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]



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