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    dots Submission Name: My Story part 2dots

    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    dotsMy Story part 2dots

    It all started during the day
    In the world, had just been born
    from the island Puerto rico

    Raised up poor but with honor
    In what many would call a horror
    Where people need to sell drugs
    Just to not be flat out broke

    Where everybody was somebody
    And gossip escaped anybody
    Loud music, school shootings
    Chaotic as action movies

    The individual meant nothing
    And the group everything
    We were all stereotyped anyways
    "they all will be dead or in county jails"

    That is where I was brought up
    The place I call home
    This is where it begins

    Submitted on 2005-10-07 14:20:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Are you sure that we didn't live across the street from each other or something...sure?

    I grew up in a neighborhood so much like this one...you always hate the hood...but you always make sure you call it home. Even though there are bad things surrounding you...you still have heart for the place that you were brought up.

    This was a great beginning to your life story. I'll have to read part 3 tomorrow.

    Much love Jose,

    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay... are you goin to write a part about your family. I mean cuz ussually if you write about bein broke ( I feel your pain) you have to have some kind of family history/background. So what is it single mom, trifflin dad. I mean there has to be a reason for the lack of money ( that make sense???) Well... anywayz I liked it.

    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice addition to the first part of this! I like how you have introduced your homeland and giving a bit of background into the society in which you lived. This is nicely written and expressed with detail to allow the reader to "peek" into your life a bit. I enjoy reading these "series" type writes from you and shall await part 3. Very nicely done and tied into the 1st poem! Good work here! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I like it. It seems to have some type of cold loneliness to it... thats just what Im getting. I like the line, "Raised up poor but with honor" Thats so pretty. I also like the part:

    "Where everybody was somebody
    And gossip escaped anybody
    Loud music, school shootings
    Chaotic as action movies"

    Its so... full of... something. I cant think of the word now (this happens to me all the time), But its awesome. ...Cant wait till part 3

    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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