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    dots Submission Name: Bite the bulletdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 878



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    What looks beautiful is scary in many ways
    I've been watching this girl, almost a stalker for days
    I can't sleep at night, she'll take over my dreams
    I'm so sad it's unexpected, I'm obsessed, it seems
    one day I finally get to talk to her I'm so excited
    heart beating out my chest, nearly ignited
    I say hi, she looks at me with hazel eyes
    I pass out or did I die
    no I"m still here, its ok
    she asked me how I'm doing today
    I say I'm fine and how are you
    she says I'm good and I've been watching you
    I'm nervous, happy, anxious at the same time
    I thought I was dead to her, but her feelings are the same as mine
    she took me back to her place, and I hit it
    but then I woke up dead, I found the bullet and bit it




    Submitted on 2005-10-07 14:54:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I could see some one like Slick Rick saying this! LMFAO!

    This was a tight lil flow that you got going on here. Not too many can hold a subject like that...they wonder off. You magnificently pulled it off though yo!

    Do your thizzle!...what else have you written?

    Li
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      niiiice! very good1his is the best and it was sweet i liked the rhyming scheme. it was perfect! good job babes!

    Suicidealchild
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is tight. i liked this one and the way u rapped about something else. expanding ur horizins. the end was weird though. i knew u was a pimp
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem, I think it's very beautiful. The end was a bit confusing to me, but I really liked the rest. I sort of know what you're talking about, but only I'm crushing on a guy. Very good. I clap for you.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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