This is a really deep and personal write You showed us thru this write how you let the positive energy in to fight away the negativity of a lost relationship Very well written God Bless Your Friend Ron
I really liked this poem. I truly did. Ive had to let somebody go before and it was hard as hell. Everytime theyd text me or call me to appologize, I wanted to forgive so bad and just let things go and start off fresh, but I had to be the stronger one and let it go. Its a hard process...something Im still struggling with. But I liked the poem alot and can relate like you couldn't imagine.
This is again a really good poem written by you brown. I really enjoy reading your work. It has such feeling and emotion into that it can't be described You don't have to change anything about this poem. It is great as it is. You have taken a tough moment but in the end made it sweet by the set of the tone instead of angry and mad. You are an excellent writer that is all i have to say about that. Thanks for another wonderful piece. Ali
I really enjoyed this. It was quiet and accepting instead of the usual angry breakup poem. You seem to show a deep understanding that when love is over there is nothing you can do. Its in the past and will stay in the past even though you don't want it to be. Like: "Legs do not quiver Letting weakness show He's the one who walked away Now you must let him go"
very beautiful. great great poem! ~Eyes do not hold gaze Least he sees into your soul~ thats my favorite part. very expressive. alot of emotion.very well writen poem over-all. im adding it to my favorites list also. have a nice day. Ashley
This was excellent, although in the state I'm in, I really shouldn't have read it as it has me almost in tears!
You really hit this emotion and the scene perfectly, it was well detailed, and very emotional. Though I'm not surprised, I've enjoyed all the work I've read of yours. Don't ever stop writing...you'll stay in my prayers, and I know something awesome is going to happen in your life. I know it.
definitely let him go... it makes me so sad to have to read these poems by you chica... i would rather you be happy, but if this is your way of getting it all out, then i will read everything you have to say.
i don't know how many times i've told you this, but you are STRONG and BEAUTIFUL and all that good stuff, and YOU KNOW IT! cuz if you don't, i'ma have to fly down to nuevo mexico and knock some sense into ya! and i don't have money for airfare, so don't make me have to do something illegal to get it. kidding. but for real though, once you can finally, truly, accept in your heart that you are better of without him, you'll be that much more happy, and that much more at peace with yourself. [love ya sis] ...bb...
Just f*cking great. Let me have a nervous breakdown right here in the library because the things that you write so mirror what I am feeling. This was really beautiful. That's all I really know to say. It's beautiful, it's eloquent, and it's both delicate and tough. You create some really beautiful poetry.
This is a good write, T. Simple and tight, it expresses how one feels when a breakup occurs. Not ready to give up yet knowing we must and trying to hold it together. You ended with a very strong stanza. Great job. Carol
This does have a very classic feel, but there are more than a couple of clichés in this (I admit that I'm guilty of that too though). I still like it, but I just think that it could be more unique in both style and content. I like your rhyme in "Hush now racing blood/ Least he can hear your rush." I like your use of near rhyme too. I hope you don't get angry with me. It's just my opinion.