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    dots Submission Name: A rainbow of lifedots

    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 913
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       I don't exactly know why I worte this, it just seemed like a good idea, and once I had decided that, the rest of it just come out...

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    dotsA rainbow of lifedots

    Red is
    comfort and love
    watching the sunset
    wrapped in blankets
    a sleeping child
    a seat on the deck
    and a warm cup of tea

    Orange is
    Lazy, sunny days
    small talk and banter
    quiet appriciation
    thoughtful reflection
    and looking back
    at the past

    Yellow is
    Laughter and jest
    child's play and fun
    spinning until dizzy
    laying on the grass
    watching the clouds
    and staying young

    Green is
    giddy with exhaustion
    spontaneity and smiles
    dress up games
    and old favorites
    laughing at nothing
    and everything at once

    Blue is
    calm and serenity
    content to sit a while
    dusky twilight
    and pre-dawn light
    quiet ocean waves
    and the diamond stars

    Purple is
    late night parties
    and later mornings
    simple pleasures
    skipping, not walking
    quirky attitude
    and unshameful gaity

    Submitted on 2005-10-07 16:35:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't really add anything to what everyone else has already expressed. I really like this. In fact, I think it is great! I love all the imagery and word painting. Everything is perfect.
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked your description of the colors blue and green the most...it's always been hard for me to characterise or categorize anything using the color green.

    My favorite thing about this poem is that the color you describe form personalities, and then whole characters in my mind as I read them. Yellow is a small cute child, Blue a reserved young lady, Green a jaded-yet-content middle-aged woman, and it just goes on like that. That's kinda neat!

    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Chihuahuii | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem. I love how you have placed certain life events with the colors of the rainbow. This is definitely a very happy and nicely written poem. It is really hard to pick my favorite stanza as they are all so wonderful but I think overall I gotta go with blue:

    Blue is
    calm and serenity
    content to sit a while
    dusky twilight
    and pre-dawn light
    quiet ocean waves
    and the diamond stars

    I love the ocean and the moon and stars and my favorite thing to do is stargaze at the beach especially with a full moon rising over the water. It is breathtaking. This is a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with everybody, it takes lots of imagination to come up with stuff like that. People can learn from you.
    Purple is
    late night parties
    and later mornings
    simple pleasures
    skipping, not walking
    quirky attitude
    and unshameful gaity

    This is my favorite part because not only do I like the color but what you chose to make it represent things I like.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you have thoughts of things with your colors. It shows that each color makes you feel differently. Very colorful poem!
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was awesome. I liked how you incorperated feelings and actions into the colors of the rainbow. Great write. But heyyyy you forgot indigo! Poor indigo, everyone forgets indigo =P
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      This sure is a colorful poem, I could almost see the rainbow as I read this... very neat, keep up the great work! You have talent, build upon it!
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write! really very beautifully put.. you seem to attach so much of feelings to colours.. i believe it requires a lot to come out with something like this.. very good imagination.. well done!
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by nnehriya | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It takes me away from all the dark poetry I usually read. So, in a way, it was a breath of fresh air. With that said, I found this poem to be cute. I'm not sure if I liked it as a whole, but I did enjoy the overall idea and effort you put into it. It made me smile, and poetry doesn't do that often.
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by QueenCrimson | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, what a nice way to put it, schmaltzy, maybe, but nice nonetheless.

    You can be really proud of this poem, it envelops all that is good, without a negative in sight, a rare thing these days.

    Excellent, and well done

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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