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    dots Submission Name: Chatroom Flydots
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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       An amusing pastime to eavesdrop surreptitiously on conservations in public places restaurants, commuter conveyances, etc . . . , most interesting of all is in Internet Chatrooms.


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    Chatroom Fly

    From his perch on the chatroom wall
    the fly absorbs with detachment,
    the electronic exaggerations
    that resonate in virtual bliss.

    Naivete eclipsed by blatant egomania.
    The feat, pairing off destiny's soul mates.
    Role play fans fragile psyche info an inferno.
    Oceans of nonsense cover desert minds in deceit.

    The pulsating glow from the screen
    anesthetizes reason and wit,
    as the vortex of fantasy draws
    its victims in like a bug zapper.

    Inevitably reality bursts the bubble
    as rationality exposes the folderol
    that fixes 'altraNet' addicts of escape
    and returns them to mundane existence.




    Submitted on 2005-10-08 05:59:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha! The picture you have put with this write is so well fitted and it made me laugh!You know this is so true. Kinda like the whole phone sex thing where the woman on the other end is making millions with her sexy voice as she entertains idiots who invision her as some beautiful supermodel when in reality she is fat with curlers in her hair and a big mole on her face with hair coming out of it! Ewwww! This poem really emphasizes how even physically unattractive people can pretend to be whatever they want to be and talk to people and tell the biggest stories of their lives! Too funny. And I bet there are so many who actually do this too! How sad! This is a good write! So true...so true! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      ted: your the observant fly

    you call these decpetions:virtual bliss.
    but really? we can dress ourselves up inot any words we want

    the human condition is wrapped up in these lines.. the pyschie and the ego comes inot play:Role play fans fragile psyche info an inferno.
    Oceans of nonsense cover desert minds in deceit
    this is way cool. you depicted it as mindless. the bug mind... the light form the screen attracts the moths, the light form the screen is the zapper!


    zapppo!
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by screams | [ Reply to This ]
      That picture is a laugh, I just had to say! I agree with you about chatroom lies - it's quite funny, isn't it?

    It's the freedom of being who and what you want to be that makes people do it... an escape from their boring mundane existence.

    I've pretended to be a woman for a laugh... it's amazing what a soft-porn picture in your profile and a deliberately provocative name will do to horny males! In fact, I found it amazingly gross... the things they say... how offensive or puffed up they can be... it's definitely an eye-opener, that's for sure!

    Did you really mean 'bless' or 'bliss'? Just wondering about that.

    An interesting piece from you Ted. I've read a few of your pieces but I don't think I've commented before.

    Well I have now hahahah.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the description you used in this piece..and that picture is great too...ppl get into chatrooms and forget who they are...lies just fall all over the place..it makes for great comedy..almost kinda sad at the same time..because eventually they do have to return to reality..i guess life away from the keyboard is harder than it looks...good write..i enjoyed it..

    ~ink~
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent Ted, very true about some folks making up who they are. ive had a couple times when a lady turned out to be a guy. you never know who you come across that is the scary thing about chat rooms. why do some people have to make up things? i know im interesting enough being as screwed up as i am. dont need to make stuff up, that is for sure. very nice piece Ted, see ya around,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good write about people who get dragged into a chat room and just can not get away from their computer for a second beacuse they are so into it... the lies that are told in a chat room are many especially when people are talking about themselves they make up wild fantasies of how they look... like the way you used a fly as a symbol of a person... they suck up all the things said in the chat room unknowingly but yeah... nice write

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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