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    dots Submission Name: The Often Questioned Minddots
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    Author: zhi wei
    ASL Info:    17, Male, Malaysia.
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 171/203/53
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I got bored while I was doing my English exam paper yesterday morning. haha. yeah, I'm that crazy. so sue me. anyway, just want to hear your thoughts about it...


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    dotsThe Often Questioned Minddots
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    The often questioned mind,
    contemplates in complication
    away from our eyes, unkind.
    With only the whispering silence
    as his faithful companion.

    The solitude is his to claim,
    his sanctuary, a birth of brilliance.
    And we, with only ourselves to blame,
    for being blind - to his ideas
    in his absence of eloquence.

    For we hear with only ears that function
    to sharps, minors, and the dissonant chromaticism
    but hearts, deaf
    to the melody
    of emotions.
    And eyes that briefly bestow praise,
    like heavy, overwhelming bells
    to the visible colours on his canvas,
    but not to the wondrous story
    that he tells.

    He is the often questioned mind
    away from eyes, unlearnt.
    Eluded, for his seeming lack of sanity
    that, to us, renders him inhuman.

    Alas, the misfortune is ours!
    He will paint
    and play on at all cost
    And while we resume our unjust thoughts
    'tis not his,
    but our humanity
    which is lost.




    Submitted on 2005-10-08 08:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I may be wrong here but I think your talking about those who are handicapped or touched by some ailment and they are not treated as what the so called norm call normal

    I have a sister who has down syndrome and trust me in my whole life I have never met a more loving soul

    Thank You for writing this
    Ron


    If you get a chance please take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think

    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i truly enjoyed reading your peace..and the words you used emphasize the depth to the reader...i particularly like the first two stanzas...i dunno know if i couldve done this while taking an exam though..i usually spend the first half hour looking at all the stressed out ppl..makes for great comedy...minds that think more abstract than others or who have created a philosophy in their own are usually condemned..ppl like to pretend that that went out in the 50s but obviously that is not so..my only thing is the sometimes the minds truth isnt what it appears...if you speak truth and society is inclined to believe does it trivialize your thoughts? do some minds get caught up in the "shock factor"...i guess you say like...saying things so that the majority wont agree and few will label you genius...overall great write...i loved it..look forward to reading more of your work

    ~ink~
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece of write here. I wish I could be this creative when bored.

    I hope I am right here but I think you are talking about the creator, God, or any other name that he goes by. Could be wrong, let me know.

    Alas, the misfortune is ours!
    He will paint
    and play on at all cost
    And while we resume our unjust thoughts
    'tis not his,
    but our humanity
    which is lost.

    This is my fav line.

    As if to say... Do and say what you want but it will not change a thing. He will do what he must.
    You will only do harm to yourself.
    So shut up and color. (means do what you are supposed to do) Old military saying. Sorry, I ramble at times.

    This has the touch of wisdom.

    Great write for one so young.

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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