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    dots Submission Name: Chronologydots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChronologydots
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    I.
    The supplicant
    chains of a
    nightmare heaven
    cling to
    derelict imagery,
    look up if you wish
    you might glimpse
    deliverance
    hush, her still
    surface hasn't
    reason to breathe

    II.
    All time
    telescopes to
    this impenitent illusion;
    all heaven, hell,
    passion, disdain,
    discretion, fire, love,
    hypocrisy, bliss, melt
    pooled memories
    into unfortunate linearity,
    their lyricism
    twists with animal
    logic, laughter, need
    the marrow bleeds
    pearls in a burnished
    psalter the unholy read,
    torn from the psalmist's
    tongue, as if to
    stifle dreams
    that can neither
    be chastened
    nor rise
    entirely free
    of a last provocation
    I have no mouth
    and I must scream




    Submitted on 2005-10-08 15:21:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the feel of this. You have done a good job of stringing the words together into a smooth flow.

    I see this being read aloud in a dark coffee house late at night. Each word having its own life and dancing through the air as party of rowdy revelers.

    Nice job!

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      man you are going way to deep for us(LOL)kidding.youre mind works a little different than a lot i am guessing.youre train of thought might be lost to a lot of people and im usually really good at interpating a write.i am not sure of this one=the reason i do like is that it shows a great depth and if i was just reading each individual sentence without putting the write together,some good thoughts and comparissions you are expressing.

    im not explaining myself as good as is like=tired
    all apologies

    cool

    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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