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Author: angel_eyes9701
ASL Info:    24 F Salem, OR
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Monday October3 rd, 2005, my mother Marie passed away. I wrote this and attempted to read it at my mothers funeral.


Remember me as I was before
Please try hard to grieve no more

I'm not far, just look above
Now resting, with others I love

So wipe your eyes and dry those tears
If your down, think back to better years

I must go, so no more fears
I love you all, my time is here.

Submitted on 2005-10-08 15:53:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  That was beautiful. I had to sing at my brother(in-law, but loved no less)'s funeral, it's hard to get up there infront of everyone.

We found out my mother had cancer my Freshman year, it was the scariest thing ever. If she left, well, my family would have fallen appart, she is the glue that holds us together.

A truely beautiful poem, I admire you for your courage.

| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  That's a very sweet dedication to your mother. It's short but you put so much emotion into it that it didn't need to be long. I'm very sorry for your loss. Though I've never experienced it, the death of a parent is always tragic. It's always good that you can write it down to let out your feelings.

Nice poem and my condolences.
| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by E. M. Dougherty | [ Reply to This ]
  Allot can be said with little or no words. I am very sorry for your loss. Losing a parent is the hardest loss.
Great job here.

I wish that I had been able to say something like this when my father passed.

God bless those left behind.

Wisdom Seeker
| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with pandora that it is short and sweet - a fitting tribute to your mother.

I don't have anything else to say. I think you said what you wanted to with brevity and emotion.

So well done on that. And losing a mother can be very hard - I nearly lost mine. But she's still here. And for that I'm very grateful.


| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

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