I'm under the impression madness dictates form (for you at least) and leaping from thought to thought like a neurotic mountain goat is simply how your mind works. I have no (that is, 0) problem with form, style or word choice in this piece, and those who are unhappy with a write about the irritability of restlessness must be plenty irritated themselves (and ,therefore, not fit to judge). You got the point across rather succinctly (with a little biting humor on the side), nicely done.
nice s h i t kid, randomness it one of those things most folk don't understand, that's why you got people like toxic rayne telling you it's wrong. i know you knew what you were doing with this. off the cuff. f u c k all that perfect format bull[censored]. it's not neccessary.
lemon whitstle your turbo frog. it's time for soup.
Your shampoo was distracting? LOL! If your shampoo can distract you it seems that you lead a boring life, it's time to get out in the fresh air my friend and find some fun away from your shampoo bottle, LOL!
Hmm. Interesting. Very interesting. It's not bad, but not amazing. It does make me thing, though, so that's a good start. And I managed to find that I understood it, which is also a good thing, I don't enjoy being confused. Anyway. It's a good start, keep it up.
I think this has some potential. I'm not being rude when I say this, it's actually a complement, but it's a bit weird. You might want to try rhyming it, or if you want to keep it prose, try making it flow nicely. See what difference it'll make. If you want it to rhyme, try a dictionary and thesarus, they help a lot when writting. I think that if you edited it some, it could be really great, kepp working and hope all goes well with your restlessness.