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    dots Submission Name: Where Angels Residedots
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    Author: dmm
    ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 741/888/102
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    Description:
       Sometimes my angel doesn't understand me writing a poem like this(like I'm waiting for another!)But I try to explain that somethings just come out of the end of my pen and I can't help myself.


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    dotsWhere Angels Residedots
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    Wake me when the winds that carry
    my true love,
    Come softly blowing cross
    Maple Ridge.
    Let me tarry not in fitful
    slumber,
    Nor close my eyes 'neath
    heavy lids.

    Rouse me from this dreary
    darkness,
    When she glides toward where
    I rest.
    Call to me that I might meet
    her,
    And take her gently to my
    breast.

    Keep watch I beg on heavens
    above,
    Where angels reside 'til set
    free.
    So that special spirit destined
    to appear,
    Finds me there on bended
    knee.




    Submitted on 2005-10-09 15:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Simply a beautiful write Dan. Love your use of imagery and your rhyme and rhythm and flow were as good as usual.

    Keep up the good work and have a blessed and wonderful day. Kudos to you.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Dan, this was a very touching piece and I agree, "IT" feels as a a prayer - My parents have an old painting my dad had when he was young and it's a small boy walkin with his fishing pole - his angel at his side - that flashed in my mind reading this and brought back a nice memory.
    I also enjoy pieces that just are gifted to us and I appreciate your sharing!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Dan,
    Truly beautiful images. Way to go!

    Thoughts:
    I understand t is an issue of form and personal preference, but the line break thing dives me nuts in this.

    It keeps me from getting into the full out flow of the words. I feel like I am riding with someone that hasn't figured out how to do the clutch thing. It feels very jerky to me.

    Feel free to write that off as my unenlightened sensibility. It likely is just me.

    It is a wonderful peace with lots of meaning and superb images.

    Nice job.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Dan, nice one, very romantic and very easy to read.

    I can see it in a sonnet, which would suit the language you chose to write it in.

    Sorta

    "enwaken me when winds that carry love
    are blowing soft across the Maple Ridge" etc.

    Lovely stuff, well done, I love a good love poem

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Dan this is a lovely romantic poem you have written here! I think it is so lighthearted and sweet yet so full of desire all at the same time. Love is wonderful in that the right person really can pick you up and carry you to heights you could have never found alone. This is filled with wonderful descriptions and reads like your pen just flowed fluidly throughout this entire piece. Excellent job on this one! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      this was excellent. i love all the beautiful descriptions. the dialect was excellent, it was a refreshing change from the norm. i love the light airy feel to the whole piece. good write, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      So soft and gentle. I liked this, Daniel. How wonderful that you want your Angel to find you as you pray. They have a way of doing that you know. Absolutely peaceful images here. A prayerful write for a Sunday evening.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's almost like a song, or prayer.
    A breezy and light feeling.
    Calling for your angel to come and carry you up on the wings of the wind.

    The first stanza was lovely,
    as it speaks of not wanting to slumber and miss your angels visit.. as she blows by with the wind.

    An enjoyable read. Nicely done.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      a very very beautiful write
    i enjoyed reading it thougherly
    you have an excellent way of expressing yourself
    you use imagery well
    keep in touch and if you can let me know when your next post is

    God bless
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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