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    dots Submission Name: ANGRY YOUTHdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       it is about all you young tough people who are too tough to listen and learn anything...trust me you'd better figure it out or you will be a very lonely Angry NOT SO YOUTHFULL PERSON


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    dotsANGRY YOUTHdots
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    Angry Youth.......
    bound and determined
    that you got something to prove.
    Did you lose someone you love?
    What happened to you inside?
    Are you one of those guys who's too tough?
    When was the last time you cried?
    Would you believe
    there is something out there for everyone?
    That little thing that sets you apart,
    that little thing that makes you number 1.
    It took me years to know what I know
    Patience really is a virtue.
    And I know I got none
    no matter how many times I tell you,
    you’ve got to make it on your own.
    All the opportunities that were given
    and second chances blown.
    Learn from your mistakes
    and take your turn
    when you're given a break.
    I see so much of myself in you.
    and really too soon
    before you know it
    you wont be such an
    Angry Youth


    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2005-10-09 15:13:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah mike. I guess this fits me. Angry youth. Though I am so angry it depresses me that I am just sad. I am too weak to try anymore and I keep failing. I think about my ex and I was there for her and would do anything at all for her. Though she left me and has blocked me out of her life like I was nothing and has ignored me eversince. I cant help to think about her at times and it really kills me inside. I guess lately has been tough. I was clean for 6 months yet I was doin pills for a couple weeks now. I dont know dude life is goin down hill again. I'm out of pills but will probably buy some soon. Either that or I'll start smokin again. I doubt I will do PCP again unless times get worse. This was a real good poem. I always like your work. I did do that poem about e you said I should do. I think it's called life rap im not sure. It's old but it really is about me. Well I'm gonna go now I see no use in posting poems o writting anymore so I just comment now and then. bye. -james
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, very nice.
    What I've always wondered is why teens pull some of the [censored] they do. I understand being angry for whatever reason, but if you demonstrate being angry by doing stupid crap, now your angry AND in trouble. Doesn't make much sense. God I was a boring teen! lol This is real good LT, hopefully a few will read this and start figuring it out.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha angry youth yea. I was one of them... I still am sometimes... you know... with our f.ucked up politics, with greedy rich pricks that just get richer and don't give a flying f.uck about anyone but themselves... but I digress.

    I like how this was simple and straightforward, speaking from obvious personal experience. I don't want to be an old git going 'where the hell am I?' - only recently have I started to buckle down, wanting to make the most of opportunities that I have ignored before.

    Typos - whose should be who's, and your should be you're... sorry, I'm an anal retard with things like that hahaha.

    Peace L.T.
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      I hat your description because I listen more than you probably do right now. It is such a frekin stereotype it's not even funny.

    But in any other case, wholly crappers. That line about losing someone we loved really hit because of what's gone on lately. I think I told you about everything that happened with Chris, and since I saw him at work since I got back, it kind of reminded me what I saw in him and made me wish that I could go back and change what happened. Eveyone at school noticed a change in me after all of that stuff went down. I guess now I really know how I felt about him, and I guess that it has really changed how I see people. Or I guess even how I show it. Maybe it's time to finally make it obvious and hope like hell that i don't get hurt instead of hidding it and getting hurt anyway. Do you really see yourself in me???

    Jessica
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Angry...many people are angry for some reason... especially our youth. I don't ever remember my peers being like today's...and that wasn't even too long ago!

    THis was a write that you just put a lot of thoughts down. A man...has he ever cried...why do men choose to hold in emotions?

    I feel that many do repeat the same mistakes...There are many trials and errors...I feel as though I have made the same mistake more then once...and each time it has bitten me right in the azz!

    I have been told that I have too much knowledge to be as young as I am many times. I have been through more experiences then many people have throughout their whole life. I am not ashamed.

    Patience was something I lacked until I had a child. She really helped me on that issue.

    This write can really put a persons mind to work. You said many true things and I hope that many can get something from it...even if they just read it and choose not to comment.

    Much Love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe that we don't repeat our mistakes, we just make them differently the next time around. But do we truely learn from them?

    I was an angry youth. I live with that fact every day. What you do say here is true LT. You can't always have it your way, and that is a lesson every youth will learn on their own.

    The only advice that those of us who misspent their yout can give is to go with the bad just as you would go with the good. Live, learn and love, but never quit believing in your true self.

    Excellent write my man. I'm glad your feeling better.

    Brightest Blessings,
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      There's a reason that the phrase, "Act your age" exists. I think that we all squander our youth to one extent or the other.

    We seem to do one of two things as youth: we work our butts off getting through school, college, internship, first house, first child, etc., and then hit mid-life and freak because we are old and haven't learned to party.

    Or, we party hard, save nothing, love with abandon, buck the system, and believe we are invincible, etc., and then hit mid-life and freak because we are old and haven't learned to work.

    Crazy how we all lament the life we choose to live, isn't it?

    I hope that my kids won't freak too bad. I try to show them that life is about work AND play, boundaries AND freedoms, love AND loss.

    Nice write! Got me rambling again!
    Hope you are well!
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Wisdom from the one who has gone before.

    This is a simple and honest write that speaks the truth from within.
    I think we all have made that journy as the angry youth.
    We should have listen when we didn't.

    I take it that you are speaking to someone dear to you. I feel as if it is your child or one near to you.
    It could be a spoken in general to all the angry youth but I like to think it is child of your own.
    Sort of like a father to son saying; I made those mistakes and I really don't want you to make them too.

    this is heart felt and a message of truth.

    This is something that I remember reading some time ago and I think it fits here too

    (Where must my young feet walk that has not been trodded with those feet that are not mine) Always looking for their own identity.

    Again nice write.

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      well i really couldn't see this as being a poem, a plain poem i could see this being a slam poem, and like that to me it makes more sense, and you do have a lot of truth and powerfull statements such as the lines

    "All the opportunities that were given
    and second chances blown.'

    I just really like this one because of how true it is and i can say that i have seen people [censored] up and get back to where they were and [censored] up again, just drives me nuts.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I relate in the same way seeing myself in others not neccesarily young people only but anyone i come in contact with. i think the message as a whole is positive. more young people need to ask themselves those questions as do most folks. i dont see this as any thing bad toward a specific group its a message to examine oneself for the better. well done,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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