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    dots Submission Name: Our Worlddots
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    Author: whisperslove
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 48/37/7
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Love Divine...


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    dotsOur Worlddots
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    Curled into our world
    you and me
    dancing,
    love's melody
    holding harmony
    in our arms.

    I find peace
    resting easy,
    soul depth beauty
    balancing me
    all ways.

    Hearts dance
    chanting rhythm,
    easing me
    into we.

    Then free me,
    for we are two
    come together
    playful,
    radiating
    Divine love.







    Submitted on 2005-10-09 19:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a lovely poem. It describes such happiness and that feeling of completeness. Being with someone who just makes you feel comfortable to be yourself. Not having to pretend or have moments of awkwardness. Just the two of you in your own world enjoying each other and the time you share together. It is wonderful when you finally find that one person you can feel complete with. This is well written and expresses your feelings well. Lovely. Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. that was a beautiful poem that tells a beautiful story and paints a beautiful image in my mind. i thoroughly enjoyed this because it is one of the most romantic peices i've read since i joined this site! wonderful write!

    ~smlaw
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by smlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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