Description: umm...its pretty much true at the end...i really hope you like it...i sort of impressed myself with it...which is sort of wierd...enjoy!!
You've Never Lived -------------------------------------------
They say you still love me
You say you hate me
My heart is in a box
And you hold the key
Ive heard youve never lived if you havnt felt love
And it hurts
The way I love you more
With each push and each shove
And im scared
Because it looks like youll never
Throw a word in my direction
And i wish i wasnt such an imperfection
Sometimes i wish the sky was falling
So it would bury all my pain
Because i know if i tried calling
You wouldnt pick up the phone
And i would be left as usual...all alone
Ive heard youve never lived if you havnt felt love
But all love brings is pain
And now ive lost more than i could ever gain
My hearts beating for two
If ever you hear i hate you thats not true
Because ill always love you
They say youve never lived if you havnt felt love
But the truth is...
Thats a lie
Because you havnt lived until youve felt what its like to die...
this is reallly great... and i kinda relate with the poem... nice talent pal... and ur rite love does bring pain and i agree with the others the last few lines are soooooooo true... there's a lot of emotion and it shows which is good. keep it up.
This is really good. I really like the last line, that was the best and really brought the piece home. The only thing I would suggest would be to be careful with your punctuation and spelling. There's a few mistakes, but they don't detract from the piece. Great write. Traci :)
There is pain in this. I know what it feels like to be alone. I love, then to have you love denied. I love the last three lines because they are all to true. When you love someone you are putting your heart in there hands to do what ever they want w/it.
Submission Name: You've Never Lived
