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    dots Submission Name: today not tomorrowdots
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    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       simplicity is beauty? take it for what its saying...


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    dotstoday not tomorrowdots
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    precise in subtle meaning,
    though eluding every sense,
    definitive answers will resolve
    the love lost in tense...
    forgiven of all faults
    received in favor before,
    we remind one forgotten
    once we had wanted more...
    for present time holds no mercy
    and governs a love denied,
    you WILL observe the heartache,
    ONLY THEN shall you decide...
    for promises of pertinance
    overflowing with potential,
    compared to a destiny
    to discover what is able,
    dictate mere intentions
    and deliver a simple word,
    never can one be satisfied
    with belief in hope absurd...




    Submitted on 2005-10-09 22:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very lovely poem. I think it is well written and expressed and the flow is good as well as the rhyme is quite good. I love the title of this one and it was what brought me in here to take a look at what was behind it. As so many always say, tomorrow never comes and how true that statement is! The message you give in this poem is an excellent one indeed! Very nicely written! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you meant 'pertinence'. Anyways, this had a lovely flow to it, it really did. Your rhyme didn't seem forced at all. Yes, it's a nice simple concept... and it's well structured. I don't really have much else to say.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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