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    dots Submission Name: ramblin bitdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 293/150/48
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsramblin bitdots
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    This is a ramblin' bit
    that just won't quit;
    and though you want to see it so,
    it just won't go.
    strives to be alive
    but just takes a dive.
    so we try something else
    with giant bonking bells(h).
    ew, that weren't so good either
    now we've got neither.
    so let's bring a circus to town
    with tigers and a sad clown
    so we can roar with mirth,
    stomp, and shake the earth
    and when that's gone too,
    and there's nothing more to do,
    we can wonder when -
    when comes the unrhyming end?






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      I love ramblin pieces just to get something out and I like this because it reminds me it's not the ending it's the journey of words or whatever with smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-10-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very intruiging for me to read, because you created a comical tone. Everything that is said throughout the lines, has an upbeat flow to it, and I think that really makes this an original and thought-provoking piece. It is a "ramblin' bit", but that makes it all the better in my opinion--it comes off as playful and not too serious. Well done!

    --Jamie--
    | Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]


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