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    dots Submission Name: Passion for a loverdots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1136
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1039



    Description:
       Please keep it real and give me what this poem needs and how does it make you feel.
    Describe to me how bad does this poem make you want for someone.
    Give me anything that you think this poem could need to make it want more viewers to comment on this.


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    dotsPassion for a loverdots
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    The art of us coming together
    as one to be a whole
    Caressing one another to
    reach that peak of sexual feeling

    The way she moves her
    body from left to right
    Never stoping until she has
    reached her climax

    Silky carmel brown skin that
    I wanna lick from head to toe
    In making love having you scream
    my name

    Together as one at last all
    this time this passion is burning for me to be inside you
    Only if we can fall in love but can
    we after we have tried so hard to

    Your eyes the way that you look at me
    and I look at you with that same desire
    My love your love all have that
    same burning fire

    Passionate love please come to me and truly let me see that you are the one for me.

    Passionate lover come and make love to me so I can give you what you have been waiting for.

    If you keep insiting to I have to give you more of what you want?




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 06:29:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW....i have to admit that poem got me a little bit......grrrrr...ive felt that way many times before....dont you just love that feeling of wanting more and more.....i hate sexual tension...i just want want that passion and love in my life....deffinately one of my favorites.

    ~kayla~
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by lonely goth | [ Reply to This ]
      ya...hooo...yes, yes!
    ya um... i like it
    its kinda ironic that my bf just left and im reading this
    i feel a bit like this is fimiliar
    cant imagin why

    good right most people arn't so in your face i love the energy
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      there is fire in this write good job! it was really good! i dont see anythingthat u need to improve so good joB! keep it up!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with CME. very good write! I felt the "fire" of this poem. you gave good images and feelings to the reader. I too would have liked it more if there was more to like but good job. I really liked ur last 3 stanzas.
    good write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this. I wish there was more to it. I want that passion and that emotion in my life, and you expressed it so well. I know whoever you're with will stay satisfied with that type of passion.Keep it up.

    C.ME
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by CompletelyME | [ Reply to This ]


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