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    dots Submission Name: Sneaky Pantsdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       This one's for Jessie. Finally, the long awaited poem about the sneaky pants!


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    Sneaky pants...
    You're a thorn in my side.
    You're too big to fit my waist,
    Yet you cling to my thighs.

    Sneaky pants...
    I have to wear a belt!
    And you get bunched up around my hips.
    It's the most annoying thing I've ever felt.

    Sneaky pants...
    Why do you insist on making me mad?
    I should just throw you away.
    You make me feel that bad.

    Sneaky pants...
    I'd give you up if I could.
    The only problem is...
    You make my ass look good.




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 09:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one made me laugh which is such a nice change. I'm in my sneaky pants now! The stanza structure a very clever, neat punchy poem.
    fantastic
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Lafferty | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty cute. I wish I were so lucky to have never had sneaky pants, but I have. I have a pair now that make my booty look good, but that's the only good thing about them. It's like a tradeoff of ugly pants or having a good butt day. They stand out from my tummy at the front and want to roll down. It beats those that go up your butt though. Seriously, I must have a weird body or something because pants are so hard to find that fit me properly. I've literally bought one pair of jeans in my life that I didn't have to alter in some way. Good job, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      LMAO. this poem was hilarious. i, too, have a pair of sneaky pants. they tend to ride right up... well, i am not going there. i have those snug pants, but they do make me look good.

    write on!
    layla
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahaha ah oh my god, that last line is definately the clincher haha oh my cheeks hurt. Now i've never had a "sneaky pants" like that you know so I cant really relate but how you describe it made it possible for me to put myself in your shoes or pants (that's weird they fit me just fine haha just kidding) so i have to say very good write.

    Kuddos,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      It was good. I can't quite relate, being a guy and all, but I can sort of see what's being said.

    Nothing really needed improving. All in all, not bad.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Tissue | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL! Funny stuff! Nice payoff for the set-up. Blah de blah de blah! (Have to write enough so I don't get that stupid message that I didn't say enough...)

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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