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    dots Submission Name: Unequilibriumnessdots
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    Author: Transcendancing
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 365/214/35
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Started based on a simple 'non' word that came up in a phrase over the weekend, blown out of proportion in my journal and hence inspired this piece.


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    dotsUnequilibriumnessdots
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    Lack
    of
    bearing...
    Wander mindscape
    Creation.
    Destruction.
    Exploration, depth of touch...
    Sensation consumes
    Cry out,
    absent sight...
    Pain, surfacing to bright light.
    Blink.
    Blink.
    Blink blink.
    Pause.
    Realism descends.
    Scattering inspiration,
    Droplets, ambrosia of genius
    Fade.
    Stability overwhelms.
    Wake.




    Submitted on 2004-04-18 22:01:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This will probly sound weird but equilibrium is one of my favorite words! (Why? who knows) So the poem title definitely caught my eye and I'm glad I read it. To me, this poem is something I can't explain but I understand it all in my head. I make up alot of words too... but I don't consider throwing a prefix on a word making a word up, I just figure I'm helping out the word! It needed a little something to get a point across, ya know?
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      I loving this, agreed that it was choppy on first read but it definitely was all good on second read. Love the line "Droplets, ambrosia of genius", although I'd rework the line "reality descends" (maybe ascends?).
    | Posted on 2004-04-18 00:00:00 | by boompatah | [ Reply to This ]
      it wasn't a case of reality ascending - it was literally a crashing down thereof, looming overhead before hand until the final moment was over then wham... there were no pretty colours in the world etc... don't you love the post con feeling? *wants con back again... must wait 12 months*
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! I too make up words sometimes, and my husband always calls me on them. But unequilibriumness is a delightful mishmash of a word, and you've expressed its meaning well. As far as reality descends, I think you've got it right. but I really like how it scatters inspiration, and the double meaning there.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Athalia | [ Reply to This ]



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