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    dots Submission Name: Moto-Bansheesdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 530
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I was at Sand Mountain in Nevada, a popular spot for sand rails, motorcycles, quads, etc.
    Fun even though I could only ride the rails because of my hand.
    I managed to escape the crowd a few times for some wonderful sunsets in the desert and some isolated meditation!
    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif


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    The shadows cast across the sand
    Man has come to tame this land.
    See his feathered rooster tail
    The ridge a wave he rides the swell ~
    It matters not age, sex or ride
    On the open mountain you cannot hide...
    Into the night you'll hear the sound
    Of the Moto-Banshees ridin Sand Mound!




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 14:08:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem has a really fun fluidity to it and almost rolls of the tongue in a song-like fashion. I also appreciate how you used few words but manage to paint a verbal picture that one can definitely clearly understand the piece. Brava Tif!

    Meow!
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      nice fun and carefree poem.
    After the last two thing I just got done reading this was a nice breath of fresh air.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha ha, nicely done Tiff, you really get into the open air, carefree spirit of dune dancin'

    Very well worded, I loved it, pity you had to onlook, next time!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your breadth and depth and differing styles of writing is quite extrordinary. But I must admit - being a rhyming nut myself I always tend to lean towards the rhyme. The poem was very good indeed. Tame the land on a quad bike ! When you mentioned the rooster, I got an image of John Wayne (Rooster Cockburn in true grit) gallavanting around the wild west saving everything and everyone - long live the memory of him.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I've never read a poem like this, it's pretty cool. I'd like to see more from you. Have you tried prose before? You ought to, you can make more of a story out of it. Good luck and keep writting!
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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