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    dots Submission Name: another stupid set of limricsdots
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    Author: DontSaveMySoul
    ASL Info:    20/m/cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 194/184/42
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Limerick/Comedy
    Total Views: 2554
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    Bytes: 575



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       the first two aren't too good, and I cant come up with a good line for the last one....help would be great.


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    dotsanother stupid set of limricsdots
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    There once was a lady named Jack
    Who saw the world from her back
    If she wished to please
    She'd drop to her knees
    Or take it right up her crack
    _____________________
    There's a man living in the hollow
    His home is more like a wallow
    Though tired of the mess,
    He'd like to confess
    Very little cleaning will follow
    _____________________
    Three guys walked in a bar
    But forgot where they left the car
    They looked up the street,
    Then down at thier feet,




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 15:25:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      These were fun to read. Thaks for the light heartedness.

    Just a suggestion for the last line of the last limric, "Then chose to go back in the bar." Not very inspired, I know.

    ~Stephen
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]
      The first two did not suck, I thought they were good. The last one on the other hand, was confusing and...well...confusing. lol. Good luck with it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't think the first two sucked..even though the second one could use some work. Yea i'm gonna get back to you on the last one though.
    Much Support
    Danni
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]



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