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    dots Submission Name: This One Night....dots
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    Author: onetruesmartass
    ASL Info:    30/F/Wa
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 934/791/77
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Spoof/Comedy
    Total Views: 356
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    Description:
       "What Dreams May Come" took on a WHOLE new meaning for me that night! lol


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    dotsThis One Night....dots
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    Snuggle into bed
    All ready for sleep.
    Hubby moves to spoon,
    Caresses my cheek.

    Something's different,
    Something's not right.
    I stiffen with fear.
    Who's in my bed tonight?

    I roll over,
    Determind to find out.
    WeWak's in hubby's spot!
    Well, how'd that come about?

    I close my eyes,
    Sure it's a mistake.
    Open them to see InSpirit!
    Not sure how much more I can take.

    He leans in for a kiss
    As I'm shaking my head.
    Suddenly it's back to hubby.
    Sweet Jesus, am I dead??

    Soft kisses
    And roaming hands
    As previous concerns
    Give way to basic demands.

    Quickening breath, racing heart,
    I feel as though I'm under a spell.
    He moves over me..it's SHRINKSDR!
    What the bloody hell?!

    I sit up in bed,
    But everything looks the same.
    I suspiciously eye the lump beside me,
    But hubby grunts when I say his name.

    Shaking, I lie back down,
    Don't know what's wrong with my head.
    But I'll tell you one thing,
    No more E.S. before bed!




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 17:55:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Although this kind of feels like I'm intruding on an inside joke, it made me laugh none-the-less.

    You certainly think a little differently to the average person...but this is a good thing for sure...

    Who wants to be "the average person"? :)
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      I was under the bed, right? Or at least in the closet...in the living room? *sigh* Oh well.
    This had me cracking up, for it's happened to me as well. And it's almost like dreaming about your family...which is equally as creepy. I've missed your twisted sense of humor, wife. Can't wait to see you.

    Always,
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! Traci,

    Thought I got in and out before you realized it was me!

    Whew! your hot babe - lucky hubby!

    Thanks for the thrill - even if it was brief and thanks for documenting it in such a hilarious and creative way.

    Of course we could of done without the other traffic

    Steve the "Spooner"
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      And I got it all on tape! HA! HA!

    Yup, you were right, I was the camera man in this dream. Worked with some pretty talented actors in my day, but filming this was like a camera mans dream...hee-hee!

    Alright, alright...thanks for the funny thoughts and I think you did a good job with this one. Not bad for a scourge. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with raven...lol

    This was very cool and intresting.
    No more ES before bed it's bad for you.

    *looks around* these people are always in your head they are watching you...*runs*
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh sure...everyone gets a shot at you in bed except me...go figure *sniff*
    Darrin wasn't feeling crowded or anything was he?

    Fabulous write Sweetness, I know that dream thing all too well after being on here before bed. Very creative and extremely fun for the fried brain this morning...well done!

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it. it was different from some of the previous pieces i've recently read. good job. you seem mosted talented...keep up the writing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Sweets | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I got MY late night chuckle. LOL
    This was just too cute Traci. You did a fantastic job in bringing out the humor of having too much ES on the brain.
    Quite a clever and cool write.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha, that was awesome! that really just brightened up my night after having to take a horrible exam. thanks so much for sharing that amusing poem!

    ~smlaw
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by smlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha ha ha! I'm SO glad that I was first...lol

    Travi, this is a great piece of topical coedy, semi-believable and very funny.

    A great piece of comic writing, I'm really proud of you

    Excellent plus.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! This is acutally pretty funny. It made me laugh pretty hard. You have a really good individual style of writing...which is wonderful so I'm not reading a whole bunch of poems that have the same meanings and what not. It's always fun to read these types of poems. I think my favorite person to dream about would be that English hottie Jude Law. That guys a frickin babe! This was really good. Good luck with everything! Take care,
    *Steph*
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by HurtDeepDown | [ Reply to This ]
      awww Traci this is very cute. no more ES before bed dearie! SHRNKSDR's orders! take two Graemes of reality herb, so you can stay in the spirit of things or else ill give you cHELL about it while having fiery eyes. that way when you wake you can still be a good idlewriter, boldly be a wisdom seeker and still hold on to your charmed identity. don’t want to end up a lost sheep in the midst of ravens and wolves! take it from me i have quite the altered life trying to affect someone’s epiphany. have lots of Joy and maybe some Candi and be that warrior poet I have come to know and love or else ill give ya a big ole weewak on your head, Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha, love yas,

    ~mike

    ps im keeping it cause its way too cute.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh no!!!! Poor Darrin!

    Well, at least you weren't calling out others names! That wouyld have been bad, bad news.

    I don't think anyone will take this wrong, I know there have been many a night I've dreamed of Mr. Brad Pitt. Makes sense that those we spend time chatting with every day would show up in our dreams.

    I thought this was really cute! How cool is it that we have found a site that we have been able to make friends and share stories with???

    Cute piece, sweetie!
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]



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