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    dots Submission Name: Kut-O-Yisdots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This 1st stanza from a Blackfoot creation of man-I hope no one takes this disrespectfully as it is not meant so. Several Native American tribes incorporate blood clots of the animals they depended on into their creation of man. In case anyone doesn't know, heparin keeps one's blood from clotting. Estrogen looks like technicolor shards in microphotography; then this ends with a comparison to artifact bits. I don't want to end up in a dusty bin, do you? I want to be a warrior!!


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    Blood Clot Boy, our bawling
    Blackfoot Blood Clot Boy,
    Boiling in a pot of buffalo blood.
    Man in a day.
    Friend to us creatures of the surging life force
    Mercy on us great she bears,
    Mercy on us swollen snakes.
    Foe to those of us coaxing vital sparks
    into our little vials.
    Butcher the cunning she devil
    Butcher the fierce swinging hag.

    Heparin, heparin, give me two cc's of heparin
    Gotta make up for that extra estrogen
    Stick it to my belly
    Magnified technicolor shards
    Spiky slivers
    Shift and shake
    They'll drift to the bottom, numbered
    in their dusty bins.
    Take up the totem, wield it surely
    Languishing is for the wandering dead.




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 20:18:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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