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    dots Submission Name: Cigarette Lovedots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I was kinda depressed and out of smokes when I wrote this so I decided to combine the two lol hope you like it. 1 love


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    dotsCigarette Lovedots
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    I lust and crave you
    When I don't have you near
    The thought of being without you
    Gives me the chills.

    Just lokking at you
    Gives me a buzz
    These emotions I feel
    Has to be love.

    It's an addiction I have
    That I don't wanna quit
    So please don't leave me
    Or I might have a nicotine




    Submitted on 2005-10-10 20:41:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i used to smoke so i can relate to this...its sad really how addicted we get to smoking...lol...i used to think if i couldn't have one the world would end...purps
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't smoke, so I can't relate to this at all. I do like, however, that this can be applied both to cigarettes, and also to the much broader subject of love. Things with dual meanings like that are fun to sort through.

    Good piece, overall. Easy to read, good flow, and good word choice combine to create an above-average poem.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Tissue | [ Reply to This ]
      This is interesting. I smoke so I can relate to this poem. It is a classic love/hate relationship. Well, at least for me it is. I like the way you describe this as it could be love for a person as well. The only thing I wonder about in this one is the very last line. It seems as if there is a word missing and the sentence seems incomplete. I thought it was going toward "nicotine fit" and it seems almost like you just forgot to type it in there? Otherwise this is a really good poem. Nice job. take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Well ya, you could be talking about anything here. I don't smoke but I get that funny feeling myself sometimes. I don't see any depression here, so you're good for while between smokes (or whatever).

    This is pretty free form, but you could use fewer you's in your lines and it would not attract so much attention. I counted four in the first five lines. All's cool, or is that Kool? A true love poem.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      fit...

    Did you leave that out on the end?

    Man...I panic when I can't even find my squares! OMG OMG where are they! LMFAO!

    This was something only a smoker could relate to. Great job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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