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    dots Submission Name: We've Collided--Slowlydots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Was is it about Cannon that makes me think about crashing? Pushing, explosions, sudden rushes of things---and all of them happening at such a slow pace. Anyway. Another one about the infamous Mateo.


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    dotsWe've Collided--Slowlydots
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    How do you know me so well? How do these years
    bind and braid and combine and chain?
    We've collided—slowly;
    crashing into each other's storms.
    So close I can hear your heart beat,
    feel you alive and constant against my cheek.
    All this time you've been near.
    All this time you've been so near.
    And I never thought to reach out,
    to find your hand there, and have you find mine;
    to feel you pulling me under and pulling
    right back. Right into each other's storms.
    All this time you've been near.
    So close I can hear your heart beat.




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      makes me wish i had someone to say this about.
    the storm imagry was interesting. i liked how they were there all along and only now could you see that and fully appreciate it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Laura Black | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay,
    I've read this about five hundred million times and each time I get something more, something exciting, something that makes me want to be happy. :) I guess they only way to describe it is that I "get" this piece. I love the idea of colliding and crashing and just holding someone who's holding you so dear too.
    This one part reminds me of my ex:
    "So close I can hear your heart beat."
    Because one time while cuddling on the couch my head was laid down on his chest and I said "I can hear your heart beat." It was just a magical moment...it's sad that it had to end but that's life eh?
    Well great piece. It brought me memories of the past, present, and hopefully future. Take care girl! I have to fav this one.

    :)

    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-10-30 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww...this just made me miss my boyfriend so much! This was simply beautiful. Isn't it a wonderful thing...to find the most beautiful comfort in another person's arms...and to know that you found your way to those arms..together..and falling in love..your right..it's just like crashing..falling...colliding...I like the idea of colliding slowly though. It's like the love took time..I like that. Anyway..great job... take care. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Adamastor. The beginning four lines were the highlight of this piece. Except when you get towards the middle, it fizzles out, picking up again at the last few lines.

    "All this time you've been near.
    All this time you've been so near.
    And I never thought to reach out,
    to find your hand there, and have you find mine;
    to feel you pulling me under and pulling
    right back"

    ... is where you lost my interest. That "all this time you've been near" and then to reiterate it again by adding, one word, just lost my interest.

    Good luck xoxoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Lipgl0ssed | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has some very rewarding lines. I particularly like the ones that read:

    "
    How do these years
    bind and braid and combine and chain?
    We've collided—slowly;
    crashing into each other's storms
    "

    These are very good. The image of pulling one another into each other's storms is also really good. It speaks of an understanding of the underlying fires that exist within us all.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by adamastor | [ Reply to This ]


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