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    dots Submission Name: Inspiredots

    Author: EmeraldJealousy
    Elite Ratio:    6.42 - 219/109/18
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I read way to many David Gemmell books...lol. I love war/strategy books that focus on social ordinances and peace within a chaotic system! It's amazing how we writers can influence the present and the future through words...

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    History culls heroes from men;
    There is a cruel injustice to this.
    Found in the pages of time and place,
    They find themselves all but stripped.
    Gone are the fearful found in stride-
    Glory and nobility yoked to them.
    The blood and the wrong brought by the strong-
    Now witty, danger-fraught litany endeared.
    History blessed those ashes of war,
    Cluttered together like merciless fire.
    Mingles within dances the names
    Of men who never chose to collide.

    Upon the tip of the flames
    There are one or two forlorn men-
    Slashing, terrorizing, brutalizing
    That which has been labeled sin.
    Gone is the passion- the furor of conquer-
    Left destitute by slashing wills,
    And all that is left after their deaths
    Are those who hold the ink and quill.
    So, painted on the canvas of parchment,
    The flow of violent imagery ensues-
    An agonizing destruction of myth and legend
    Heralded, by writers, as

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      I love the ending of this poem. The concept of painting on the canvas of parchment is delightful. It's what I try to do. And it's very true, how much power writers have, as the recorders of hstory. They say the history books are written by the winners, but it's the writeers that put their own spin on it that can change what everyone knows. Truly a powerful tool--or weapon. Thanks for the thought-provoking poem.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Athalia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent. I agree with the idea you put forth too. War is idiocy. I love the lines "An agonizing destruction of myth and legend/Heralded, by writers, as /Muse."
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      in these troubled, filthy times it is refreshing to read poems that put war and conflict in its place.
    | Posted on 2004-04-18 00:00:00 | by All1Mind | [ Reply to This ]
      this should be a part of,or somehow the introduction to your book,

    is that movie rights i smell,
    as a writer /warrior muse ,are you prepared for the madness that this art entails,you sound like devotion is part of your m.o.
    well get the rest of those chap's written rewrite comes later and remember perfection is the poison that kills us in err,much like the juliet whose love could have lived had they just stepped back once in awhile and looked it over
    and xcepted that perfection will find its way into us,oops there i go again by!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]
      i too love to read how artist throughout the ages have had such influence on politics and war/not to mention can really piss off goverments for there message when that message depicts controversey to there so called principles .
    put it out there i love your descrip's as well as your writes.
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]

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