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    dots Submission Name: Whispering Willowdots
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    Author: dreamweaver
    ASL Info:    28/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 1022/443/42
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This was just something that I happened to notice on a drive.
    Weeping Willows have always intrigued me and when I saw one in the background of 2 people holding hands, this is just what happened to come to mind.


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    A cool breeze touches the sun-kissed fields,
    gently they sway to the wind's sweet melody.
    Hills reach to touch the face of heaven.

    The willow whispers a soft prayer.

    Two lovers hold hands,
    flying free;
    giving their souls to one another,
    as soft colors begin to paint the sky.
    A fiery portrait of beauty fills their eyes.

    Still,
    the willow is whispering of a love come and gone.




    Submitted on 2005-10-11 09:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love and enjoy nature and to me, trees have personality and an aura of being that intriques me and brings me to peace.

    I like the picture you painted here & I could picture the trees swaying lazily and the lovers and the humble ending that like the breeze love can come and go but it's important that you enjoy the NOW.

    Great!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      you know what i really enjoyed this, not to mentin the fact that i know how you feel i am usally motivated by the smallest of things to write about
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really exquisite work. Love the flow and tone of this, how the words make you feel like you're flying too.

    Excellent.
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite the lovely poem. truly an ode to the lovers as well as the willow tree. i greatly appreciate the elegance with which you paint this portrait of love. it is an infinity moment that you have captured for us here, a snapshot of glory. it is as written dynamically and possess quite the exquisite theme. very powerful!!!
    i love this piece and i am going to fave. it. wonderful job.

    God bless you.
    john-paul

    p.s. i would be honored to have you leave a comment on one of my writes. thanks.
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Dreamweaver:

    The poem is clear and concise as to what images you portray here.

    I particularly love the descriptive tone you used of love and mystery. I am in a romance that has taken me far beyond this world and my willow is far from weeping...just kidding but very serious about my romance.

    This piece has a lyrical and yet mystical feeling as does the weeping willow. Very interesting and even ironic how in the background there are two people holding hands while the weeping willow is behind. I am associating weeping = sadness and love = happiness.

    It is an enjoyable read and the imagery is stark!!!

    I've been away for sometime, but feel that this comment is long overdue...sorry for the delay.

    Luv Saby~*~
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by CaramelCandy | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. I like how you used intense yet simplistic imagery to portray the scene. It's as if I can still close my eyes and see the sunset and hear the whispering of the branches in the breeze. Perfecto.

    DeepDreamer2008
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Candi,

    now I have two Favorite Willow poems. The other one is Steve's 'Sunset over the Palisades' which I suggest you take a look at.

    I see the word 'still' as you have used it here to mean 'quietly or calmly' Not as 'In addition to that, the willow is whispering...'

    'Still (quietly), the willow is whispering of a love come and gone.' The two lovers are listening to the whispering of another love as they give their souls to one another.

    The love come and gone could have been 50 years ago, by the same quiet tree.

    Donn
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work Candi. I like how the willow seems solid. It's been there for years and lots of lovers have came and went beneath those whispering bows. People are comparatively short lived and their romances can be even shorter. Still, the willow will be there, ready for the next sunny summer afternoon.

    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to catch my breath at the end of this poem. It's intricately weaved to form this eloquent story of two people deeply in love. A little short maybe, but powerful all the same. The ending is PERFECT. So much emotion bottled up in one fading sentence:

    "Still,
    the willow is whispering of a love come and gone."

    Gorgeous. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by taint_meplease | [ Reply to This ]
      it is my goal to plant a weeping willow in my yard this spring. i have always loved their beauty. and i love this very romatic poem.congrats on your blur ribbons. you truly deserve them for this wonderful poem!
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya know, I have to say this is a very beautiful poem. I love how it just flows and paints the scenary in my head piece by piece. The ending sentence just fits it so well. It was really short and simple...but I really enjoyed it. It made me feel like I was really there.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I got a strange vibe from this, and didn't really understand it the first couple of times I read it, but, after reading it some more, I started to get a slight idea of it. Even if it isn't what it was meant to be, I thought that the willow seemed to symbolize a hope somebody (maybe you, maybe another) once had that has for the most part died, or otherwise gone away, but a little bit of it is still alive within them, because they don't really want to let go of it.

    Or something. =P

    Either way, very nice poem, one of my favorites.
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by Trifecta | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent, throws me back to the days when i spent my time reading lots of british romantic poetry. the simplisticly and lack of high speak gave the whole thing a crisp and brisk feel that left the reader feeling nothing was lacked. excellent.
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by ozymandias | [ Reply to This ]
      as i keep saying i hate love poems, but this is another one i happen to like... you dont use the same old love poem clichés and that is what i like... so kudos to you...

    although i dont know many willow trees myself, i do know many other magnificant trees and am a firm believer that trees possess many magical powers, and love is just one of the many things they dabble in... but then again, i have been called a tree hugger and embrace that title...

    but i digress... nicely written and a great love poem...

    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the simplicity of this one and the theme of love. its always a good theme i wish i had a better grasp on
    -jon
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by jbb360 | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally know a bunch of big Willows and I have listened to them whisper in the breezes. You must have one nearby, to know of the wonder a tree like that can produce.
    I remember a wedding under a giant tree, and as it weeped for the couple, it was described as happy tears for their union, and sad ones also for the rough times ahead.
    I do believe a Willow might have a bigger effect on love than the Moon himself, what a compitition that might be! Underneath a willow in the bright moon light, Hmm thats another love poem for you to write.
    GREAT write here, it was a real connection for me, no fixings from my view point.
    LATER
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. it seems soothing when u talk about the sun-kissed fields, the willow whispering a soft prayer, and the wind's sweet melody. i believe this poem can make any person calm and relaxed and make them want to go or be in this place. the romance added to it was nice. keep up the good work

    -Steph-
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by roxygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      very pretty yet melancholy at the end, with the
    willow weeping for a past love. i just wrote a
    weeping willow poem too, they really are such
    elegant trees, yet they seem to possess a
    universal sadness..i like that the willow whispers
    a soft prayer. i wonder what she says.

    it's nice to read you again.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a powerful poem really. It gives me two overwhelming emotions while reading. Of a love that is, and a love that was. Also, it has wonderful nature expressions woven in with delicate thread. Very nicely done. You've captured the scene (mentioned in your description) wonderfully with your descriptive words. Great imagery and feeling.
    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem, breathtaking. I like your approach, willows as witnesses of love and life, beauty and sadness mixed together.
    “Hills reach to touch the face of heaven. “ my favorite line. It is so touching.
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      I once knew an old man by the name of Gibb and he always sat underneath a old weeping willow tree and drank his wine. Thunderbird wine no doubt...
    Anyway whenever I come across something about willow trees I always think of that old man that no-one understood but was a friend to me.
    So I guess you could say you kinda took me down memory lane with this one and I enjoyed read'n it too...
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooo...I liked this one Candi! I like weeping willows too and there is a huge one at my office. They just give me that feeling that you have shown here in your words...majestic contentment.

    Nice job with this one and it whispers all of love. Sa-moooooooth!

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Candi this one is absolutely wonderful. i feel great reading almost every line here! except the last line its sad with love gone. this is a wonderfully illustrative write with excellent metaphoric language. i love how music and visual art is represented here and my favorite line "A fiery portrait of beauty fills their eyes."
    that is excellent!
    you get two blue ribbons for this one!

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Candi, what a lovely little snapshot, you painted a beautiful picture with your words.

    My only hitch was the word "still" it had more of a "but" meaning as though there was something else.
    I'd just delete that word. Only my thoughts, I thoroughly enjoyed the fifteen or so reads that I gave this, and every time was lovely.

    Well done

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      you produce such fantastic imagery in your writing,this poem really does take you somewhere else,a beautiful portrayal of love, watched over by a wise old tree seemingly all knowing and understanding.If only they could talk ehYou have captured my imagination once again
    Graham
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh how lovely.
    I simply love the idea of Weeping Willow's being the witnesses of love, past present and future. They are such mystical tree's, aren't they? This is a great piece, Candi..defininte fave!
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      a very good write
    the image this poem gave me was a couple who found true love yet they are not selfish
    they feel a little guilty because there is so many who have not yet touched that sensation
    i may be wrong but that was what i felt
    keep writing i enjoy your posts as they are very uplifting
    the line hills reach to touch the face of heaven
    Beutiful

    Take Care
    and please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful poem, here. While the first part of it details the wondrous attraction between two lovers, and the beautiful effects it seems to have on the world about them, the willow remains solemn, remembering of many that came before them, only to be swept away. You managed to create a piece that evoked many, many more words in the reader's mind than was actually displayed here. Fantastic write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Tissue | [ Reply to This ]
      i also love weeping willows. they are so beautiful, so different.

    this poem was so peaceful. i loved your discriptions, they were painting a beautiful picture.

    'A cool breeze touches the sun-kissed fields,
    gently they sway to the wind's sweet melody.
    Hills reach to touch the face of heaven.

    the begining was my favorite part.
    it was very captivating. sun-kissed fields, i always loved that expression.
    as the others that you used.
    the couple in the piece was also really cool. i like how you brought nature & that together.
    beautifully done.
    thank you for such an enjoyable read.
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh...I wanna go there! hee hee! I love weeping willow trees! They are so elegant and especially when the wind blows and their long branches sway, mmm...nice thought! This is a lovely poem. Wonderful descriptive qualites here just make me wanna jump inside this poem. And you added some wonderful romance to this piece which always adds a nice touch. I really enjoyed reading this one. And I really wanna go there too! Beautiful! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. I could see the willow and the couple, I could hear the the willows prayer. I'm sure the hearing was helped along by the song I was listening to, but still. I love willows, they seem to always make me want to think. Think about good things, memories and such. The willow, a good breeze, and someone to share it with. Nice.

    Thank you, I needed something to calm me and make me smile.

    Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


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