Description: I dunno where the hell this poem came from..The words just seemed to poor onto my paper :S Also I couldn't think of a name before...Now I thought of a better one than Scars Voices World
They tell me to smile... -------------------------------------------
The scars on my wrist
Tell me this
That I should live no more
That the blood should pour once again
The voices in my head
Tell me I'm dead
Longing to be alive
And longing to thrive
The world around me
Tell me to be glad
Tell me to smile
All the while
The world is falling around us
The homes and town of many are gone
All the while
They tell me to smile...
i love it i love how you express a feeling of already being gone and longing to be alive i have a poem much like this one its called Okay see if you can find it if you cant look later
Great write. Very easy for most to relate to and understand. I think "...once again" doesn't really fit there and "...us..." in the third stanza should be "me," just my opinion. Other than that, keep up the good work.
A very good write, this one i must say i wouldn't change except, "The world around me Tell me to be glad Tell me to smile All the while"
I'm pretty sure it should be "Tells me to be gald Tells me to smile" but other than that it was great, short yet it hits a nurve, and its meaning it there, very good, in this one the reader, (i myslef included) can relate to the piece. Nice Work.
sounds familiar, my parents try to tell me to smile when i can't...This poem is really good, my fav part would probably be: Longing to be alive And longing to thrive...
those lines landed me on my butt for some reason, i can relate to this peice sadly enough. I think a couple of the words in the first stanza don't fit, but other than that i love this...oh and the title...may i make suggestions? i believe that "tell me to smile" would be the sum of this right? i just think that the title isn't that good.other than that i love it, and it's going on my favs list!
Submission Name: They tell me to smile...
