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    dots Submission Name: Fire Skydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       A desert sunset


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    dotsFire Skydots

    Atop Sand Mountain Peak
    Sunset Crimson Blazing
    Horizon Aflame
    Desert Burning


    Melting in Color
    Sand Alive
    An Evening Oasis
    Reflected Fire in the Sky

    Shaman Dance of Sand
    Distant Sun
    is Father to Man

    This I See
    Atop the Mount
    Enveloped in Light

    Submitted on 2005-10-11 16:19:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I grew up in the Panhandle of Texas, and loved those blazing red sunsets.

    Great word pictures here Tif!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-06-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely prose. Your words are very well chosen and the imagery is wonderful. I love sunsets. They are beautiful and each one is original all to itself. My favorite is as it sinks into the ocean, or so it seems. I live near the ocean and I go there frequently. I love to watch the sunsets over the ocean. Just a remarkable beauty. I have never seen one in the desert and I imagine it must be incredible to see. Your prose has captured a wonderful picture in my mind. Lovely job with this. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      well this piece..i really liked it..even though it is short it seems to convey its total meaning...my favourite line..'the shaman...' very well written. the eternal dance of sun (light) and night (darkness) but the most important time..when they meet..this poem seems to convey all of that...
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I can almost picture a cheyenne maiden standing on a precipice and chanting this out to the wind almost challenging it. Your composition, though fractured in thought patterns, works extremely well with the lyrics you used. I very much enjoyed this piece. thank you for sharing!

    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, your magery is very good. When I read this, I see a native shaman dancing under a crimson sunset, chanting. You express you idea very well. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Not much I can add to the above comments. Funny what a real blast of inspiration can do. It must have been a breathtaking view you lucky lady.
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice imagery going! I love the way you describe the desert. I have a picture in my head. I love you beautiful the desert is at night though!
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this is great man... there's so much of energy and i really love it...i'm in awe man.. total awe...great work... keep it up

    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      You wrote something a while back about the sun over the ocean.
    This to me seems to be just as beautiful if not more.

    Thank you for the visions
    and thank you just cause.

    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]

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