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    dots Submission Name: send me awaydots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 252
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    take this while it last
    in this world of violence
    i would rather be heaven sent
    looking down i would see
    a perfect life, a perfect world you see.

    stuck here in middle earth
    the ground so shaky, so hard
    to young to independent
    to old to trust anybody
    im out here to battle my own

    its not like me to walk the path
    darkness, darkness seemingly calls my mind
    i need the fix but not the rhyme
    slowly i crave the neediness of love
    oh sweet nothings ive become

    just another junkie addicted to this fix
    loves an equal bliss
    searching through desolate land
    begging pleading someone to take my hand
    its not like me to need you so much

    dont tell me that were not meant to be
    look in my heart baby tell me what you see
    i cant stand a single day away
    i need to find my own true self
    just like they say "to thy own self be true"

    its such a contridiction when im with you
    im whole, alone im a mess
    i cant believe it.. i fell for his benevolent ways
    striking in contrast, lacking in warmth
    completely im spell bound
    wow so quicky im hurt




    Submitted on 2005-10-11 20:51:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem made me think off all thie things going on in your life...YOUR life...and...like...idk...its just...your in a bad way...and..its starting to control you
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Seedofbayne | [ Reply to This ]


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