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    dots Submission Name: Fractureddots
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    Author: vampire
    ASL Info:    18 y/o female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 16/16/6
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 830



    Description:
       I wrote this poem under great stress and anxiety, mainly to vent my pain in some harmless way. i was wondering what people think of it???


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    The sea is calm tonight,
    Languid darkness lies alone
    Among rocks unpolished,
    But for the rolling kiss of foam.
    Below eyes can only see darkness
    From this spire, a rocky cliff or grave
    For the discontent, the lonesome,
    A heart broken: suicide of brave—
    Yet a wretched, ruined spirit roves
    Drinking the violent still, the quiet,
    As below, fractured memories flow,
    Locking iron chains of the past.
    In the interstice of a broken mind
    I see the shattered stone and shale,
    And against black rock crimson lined,
    A body in blood washed, cold and pale.
    Rocking to and fro among the breath
    Of a sullen sea’s lone wave,
    Red flushes the clear, as death
    Buries a lost soul in its watery grave.




    Submitted on 2005-10-11 21:59:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved this, very emotional, passionate, pure, honest all the ingredients of a great poem. Good job, keep it up.

    Kuddos,
    jermaine.
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      great work... there 's a lot of emotion which is what make this great... i really like they way u express the situation and wat your feeling...
    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      Very dramatic. I loved the lines:
    A body in blood washed, cold and pale.
    Rocking to and fro among the breath
    Of a sullen sea's lone wave.

    Beautiful.

    Crackwalker
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]



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