Description: Please tear it apart it is so terrible one of my worst poems ever!!!!!! I hate this and I just thought of it here and now. Please just tell me what to do to try and make it better!
This Love -------------------------------------------
Powerful a love a union
of two people in love.
A day when the night gave
birth to the sun,
I looked around to find
I did not find myself but
instead I found you.
You waited for me and only
My words were lost when that first
"I Love You" spoken.
My heart stolen when you offered
your heart for mine.
Burning passion grows within when I think
of your touch.
It's okay. I agree with the person below me, you should use some bigger words and such. It also ends kind of abruptly, you should've closed it better. Other than that, it flows nicely and it's pretty good.
This one can be sweeter if you use some uncommon noun or verb, since a romantic poetry usualy contain uncommonly used words A day when the night gave birth to the sun, I looked around to find myself. Burning passion grows within when I think of your touch. thats sweet keep it up n take care
Btw i like the way u use Burning passion on seems to be strange since its not related to the topic, is it possible that you already know the boy when you were born? Its just my oppinion.