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this is a bit strange. i dont know what its about or why i wrote it. maybe you can tell me. im not sure it all goes together. sorry for my insanity.
down, down, down
nothing more, nothing less than my self and my disintegrating sanity standing here wasting away in front of all of humanity that stupid saying "nothing ventured, nothing gained" i looked before i leaped and threw everything away i walked myself to the edge of everything and nothingness i wanted to plunge into this abyss but my i was weighed down by my blanket of fear colder than any cover ive ever felt before but stupidity crept up silently taking me by surprise i jumped, i flew now im falling away from the pain falling away from you falling away from all that i know no thinking, no dreams no hopes, no pain, no heart, no brain no clarity, all is blurry no need for vision because theres nothing to see i walked myself to the edge and got tripped up i fell or did i fly without warning and now im falling |
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Umm, I like the repetitiveness and using the saying “nothing ventured, nothing gained”… this has first-class imagery. You can defiantly see you falling, your hair flying all around your face…and in your mind you’re thinking, “why did I do this again?”| | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ] | I liked this one. I thought it was very good. It gave a clear overview of everything that was going on and all feelings of helplessness. Good Job! | | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ] | great visualization on this piece i liked how each sentance puts an image in my mind. i think it probly came to u as a dream and you just wrote it out of instinct. | brandon | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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