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down, down, down

Author: EEKS
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this is a bit strange. i dont know what its about or why i wrote it. maybe you can tell me. im not sure it all goes together. sorry for my insanity.

down, down, down

nothing more, nothing less
than my self and my disintegrating sanity
standing here wasting away in front of all of humanity
that stupid saying "nothing ventured, nothing gained"
i looked before i leaped and threw everything away
i walked myself to the edge of everything and nothingness
i wanted to plunge into this abyss but my i was weighed down by my blanket of fear
colder than any cover ive ever felt before
but stupidity crept up silently
taking me by surprise
i jumped, i flew
now im falling away from the pain
falling away from you
falling away from all that i know
no thinking, no dreams
no hopes, no pain,
no heart, no brain
no clarity, all is blurry
no need for vision because theres nothing to see
i walked myself to the edge and got tripped up
i fell or did i fly without warning
and now im falling

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  Umm, I like the repetitiveness and using the saying “nothing ventured, nothing gained”… this has first-class imagery. You can defiantly see you falling, your hair flying all around your face…and in your mind you’re thinking, “why did I do this again?”
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one. I thought it was very good. It gave a clear overview of everything that was going on and all feelings of helplessness. Good Job!
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
  great visualization on this piece i liked how each sentance puts an image in my mind. i think it probly came to u as a dream and you just wrote it out of instinct.
| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]

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