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The Season of Leaving

Author: Epiphany
ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342 /2139 /390
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Just one of those out-of-nowhere pieces that flowed out watching an Autumn sunset and sipping a glass of wine.


The Season of Leaving

The Season of Leaving
A Cyclical Tale
Summer is Grieving
Visiting Autumn Gale
Whispering Winter Thieving
Puts Spring in Bare Jail

The Season of Sowing
A Divine Stage
Coming, Living, Going
Love Inherent Not Rage
Soul of Goal Growing
Living Life Stage
Does A Garden Need Hoeing
"IT" Continues ~ Turn the Page

The Season of Growing
A Bright & Shining Light
Brooks Flowing, Breezes Blowing
Painted Hues of Night
Colors Variegated Showing
Feeling Taking Flight

The Seasons of Dying
No Particular Sound
"IT" Counts ~ Trying
All Lost is Found
Society Needs Buying
Why Are the People Bound
While Mother Nature's Crying
Ashes to Ashes, Dust to Ground

Submitted on 2005-10-12 10:38:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I figured that if Frank M. likes it, it must be good. I liked it. It had a nice rythm and pretty words. All, of course, wrapped inside a package of perfect rhyme scheme.
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| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  You write with such an experienced pen. This is one of many I really seemed to like. Your words are so powerfu and yet beautiful which can be kind of a challenge in it's self. I love the way your writing gives the feeling of experience. Sometimes there can be lack of emotion in great lines but you seemed to have been in this situation and wrote this from your heart.

great job

I would really appreciate it if you critique a few peices of my work, but please be easy on "WRITERS MUST WRITE."

| Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
  That was ssoooo cool. I really liked your ryme pattern. ummm... I cant really think of anything else to say. *Im speechless* (a very hard thing to do). Good job!
| Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a lovely poem with a wonderful style you have here. I really enjoyed the brilliant imagery and your descriptive words really bring this one to life. I love the rhyme scheme here as well, very cleverly done. I read your description and said Ahhh...two of my favorite things, the sunset and a glass of wine...I just knew I couldnt go wrong with this one and sure enough I was right. A beautifully written nature poem. Lovely! Take care.

| Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Tiffalicious, how the hell did I miss this one?

Simply brilliant! And in a wonderful rhyme!!!

It lends itself to be spoken aloud, with the inflections and accents that do it proper justice.

Brilliant work, Tiff, I'm glad you noticed I hadn't been here...I must be more careful in future!

Eleventeen stars for this one *************

Ne Happy

| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  What lovely words and it ALL rhymed ! It took me on a little whirlwind journey around the seasons and I felt I waas actually walking through them all. Superb.
| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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