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    dots Submission Name: Bliss Gardendots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 562
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       I've been having problems with my son's father and although after years I know what I should say and what I shouldn't take but he starts in & I feel like a belittled child and dreams are only for crushing with sharp angry teeth and words that sting me into emotional distress.

    And sooner now, I stop and I check myself and I remember that I am here and he is there and I don't have to feel so small for to get here I was very strong.

    Don't ever let ANYONE or ANYTHING make you feel your dreams and hopes are nothing ~ make them your reality


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    dotsBliss Gardendots

    Do you not See
    Eden in the
    trees, meadows &
    In both brother's & sister's
    Or have we just
    been blinded
    by the

    The Garden of Bliss
    is an allegorical state
    of Divine
    which manifests


    Worlds within Worlds
    within Words

    For Ever More.....

    Dreams are realized in the reality of NOW

    Submitted on 2005-10-12 13:44:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The people of the world should unite and pass a law that ALL dreams will come true. And while they are at it - pass another law outlawing lies, evil and poverty. Your poem was as usual - very inspirational and very good.
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, Tiff, we all need to be reminded of what is really important, as, like you said, we are easily blinded by the lies of living in the modern world.

    Very nice, Tiff, and inspirational, too

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummmm short lines... I like the line breaks and I'm almost always a sucker for short lines, so I was biased bfore I read this piece. bonus points for using the word allegorical in a poem. the last line upset me bit, but it could just have been that i was enjoying a nice metaphoric ride and you said reality now and there was. Bit of a buzz kill. 4 outta 5
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by aghori | [ Reply to This ]

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