Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Elven Land


Author: Tissue
ASL Info:    17/Male/New York
Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 80 /87 /33
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 535
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 479



Description:


I'm not much for using archaic words, but I was in that sort of mood, and cranked this one out. Again, I'm still in the middle of submitting my old stuff. This is about a year old.


Elven Land



Land of mystery and beauty's desire,
Land clothed in foliage, harp, and lyre
Spring up, ye Old Folk, and come to her.
Within your hearts, a song will stir.

Come to the land, of feasting and wine,
A land touched by angels, beings divine.
When table is cleared, and quieted, the throng,
Then will you sing this eternal song.

Land, so free, speak thy grace,
Show unto me thy wisened face.




Submitted on 2005-10-12 19:41:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  i like this. Its just, springy and makes me laugh a little. Not in a bad way or anything. heh. anyways, the flow is good and the rhyming. usage of words and all that jazz... awesome. but, it almost seems that you should have gone on a little bit more... like you could add more to it. Maybe thats just me, i don't know, but i do like it
~kat
| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by PsychoBabble214 | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



77440