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Loving You


Author: angel_eyes9701
ASL Info:    24 F Salem, OR
Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 19 /33 /14
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Just expressing my emotions and feelings inside.


Loving You



When we're not together,
I miss you so much.
I want to be with you
and feel your gentle touch.

When you look into my eyes,
I feel like I'm on top of the world.
You mean everything to me,
and I'm glad I'm your girl.

But when we're apart,
that feeling goes away.
I want to be in your arms
all night and all day.

Do you miss me
as much as I miss you?
When we're not together
do you want me, too?

The days we spend together
are days of pure bliss.
I'll never forget the feeling
of the moments when we kiss.

When we're not together,
I want you here with me.
I want to be in your arms
for an eternity!




Submitted on 2005-10-12 20:29:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I am going to be dead [censored] honest here and don'yt take offense ..........but this is Halmark poetry--mundane same ole stuff --love me /love you /in your arms for eternity crap.
Now please dont take this personal it is just as writers it is difficult to find nerw ways to say I love you and I feel like " whatever" when I am in your arms.....it is hard to do ! I knowbut my point is that anyone in the entire world could have written this to anybody--I mean I could slap my name on it and it wouldn't change a thing it is generally speaking to this love which isn't persoanl and quite honestly boring unless it is the person you are talking to,, I hope you understand--I just want to help in any way possible.
LT
| Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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