Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Miss Youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: TylerP
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 18/26/11
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 717
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 771



    Description:
       I just wanted to write a poem like this and this is what came of this want.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMiss Youdots
    -------------------------------------------


    It's been so long
    Since I last saw you
    I want so much to change this
    It makes me so sad

    I need to return to the past
    When we would see each other always
    Those days were among my best
    I feel emptyy now without you

    My feelings have become numb to all
    I feel frozen in time
    Until you return to free me
    My soul longs more and more every day

    I can't see where I would be today
    If I had not had time spent with you
    I feel broken inside
    I can't control my anguish

    I miss you, so badly
    I need you, desperately
    Please return to me
    Please come back from your abscence
    I miss you so much




    Submitted on 2005-10-12 21:50:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I really liked this and think that many people feel this way about different people throughout their lives...it strongly reminds me of my exhusband actually and the feelings he expresses to me...you captured it nicely...and simple can be simply perfect..well done...stormy
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this write deeply. I'm away from the person I love right now, and will be for a while. Indefinately, really. It's a horrendous feeling. You got me deep bro.
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by Dipsomniac | [ Reply to This ]
      Tyler, I enjoyed reading your poem. In your next one I'd go in to more detail. I think you are ready for the next level, really. In this poem ,the words are simple. I felt calm after reading it. I knew your emotions through out the whole poem. That is a good thing and a bad thing.
    I want to be able to think about a poem when I read it. I think you poem gives the meaning out on a silver platter. If you are fine with that I'm fine with it.
    It seems very common to me. Who is this poem to?

    ~Jinxe
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by Jinxed | [ Reply to This ]
      very good write. the one thing that i like most about this poem is that you never specify the relationship between the two people. it could be a relative that died, a friendship lost, or even a love lost. this quality really makes it a piece that can be related to universally. i pleasure to read!

    ~smlaw
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by smlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      a very deep and personal write
    i can relate because i for instance havent seen the woman i love more than anything my mother in 7 years
    not a day goes by that i dont think of her
    i am planning a trip this november to the eat coast to see her
    i hope you find her or him again and are able to heal a wounded heart

    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    77458

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry