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Torture


Author: lastdragon
ASL Info:    19/F/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 38 /43 /13
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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this poem expresses my frustration about....how about you read it and figure it out yourself you lazy bums ;-D actually y'all r awesome enjoy!!


Torture


I see pain in every face
I hear wails in every house
I feel suffering in every heart
I taste death in every breath

I Konw
I Feel
I Stay
I Run

I want to erase the pain
I need to silence the wails
I have to stop the suffering
I will conquer death

I Fight
I Love
I Heal
I Can't

My own pain blinds me
My own wails deafen me
My own suffering numbs me
My own death takes me

I Lose
I Fail
I Scream
I Die




Submitted on 2005-10-13 16:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  GREAT! I think i was the first to see this...(wink) but this is excellent. Its really more like a song than a regualr poem, and i think its a really good at being both. anywayz, keep up the good work Jes-i mean, lastdragon...lol
| Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  that was really, really good:) love ur descruption:-D the repitition unlike with most poems actually helped this one be better:) nice write.
keep writing.
Peace.
| Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting layout choice. I thought over-all that this was written quite well. You were very repetative, and never lost me in the track of changing topics, or moving.
| Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh that was awsome. I loved this. ussually I dont like repetitive poems. but this was really good.
I see pain in every face
I hear wails in every house
I feel suffering in every heart
I taste death in every breath
I liked this part best
| Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]


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