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    dots Submission Name: Water drops like tearsdots
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    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 874
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this is a poem i wrote in corespondence to a picture my friend drew...you can find it here --------------> http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/23707933/

    So ya thats about it!


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    dotsWater drops like tearsdots
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    Cold water that reminds me
    Of light...of tears...
    Washing away the pain,
    Washing away the fears.

    So cold when it hits,
    But welcomed, it shall fall
    The light that will heal me,
    The light that cleanses all.

    The tears that will fall
    Are like dropplets of rain,
    That fall on my body,
    That wash away pain.

    The water may be cold
    But it drives away the fear.
    Afraid of what is comming,
    Afraid of what is here.

    Timcanpi don't tell Linali...
    I'm scared...




    Submitted on 2005-10-13 18:50:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with sweet_rayne. This is well writen, and in itself is gorgeous. I'm sure the picture is just as beautiful to inspire this. The flow of this is good also. Keep up the good writing. Ciao.
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot. i wish that this type of thing actualy existed maybe than life wouldnt be so messed up. anyway great write i thought that the mechanics of this peice were really good. so great wrok and keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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