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    dots Submission Name: Paradoxdots
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    Author: Tissue
    ASL Info:    17/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 80/87/33
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 697
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    Bytes: 224



    Description:
       Short, semi-sweet, but definitely pessimistic. Probably just a few months old, at this point.

    I know it's short, but that's the point.


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    dotsParadoxdots
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    Buried head-first in
    Crystal water.
    Burned ritually with the
    Purest ice.
    Killed inside by a
    Saving thrust.
    Disowned by that
    Unfound trust.

    I live the paradox.




    Submitted on 2005-10-13 20:01:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like paradoxes...they make you think, and they're just neat to read...

    complete honesty...this piece made me think of caesar....i have no idea why, but the whole time i was thinking of shakespear's play...so....hmm, interesting connection....

    short piece, and that is the point, but...i didn't really find a point...

    other than the fact that you live the paradox....which is, i suppose, enough

    interesting write...very different from your newer posts
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]


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