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    dots Submission Name: Needed(edit)dots
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    Author: miss__smiles
    ASL Info:    16/f/Soo, Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 117/110/20
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 693
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 879



    Description:
       I'm taking a new edge to my poetry, let me know what you think.


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    dotsNeeded(edit)dots
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    Needed
    is
    the mother
    who just gave birth
    to a beautiful
    baby girl.
    Is
    the friend
    when you're
    hung over
    and hurl.
    Is
    the ear
    that listens
    when you
    need it to.
    Is
    the pain
    that makes
    the mirror's reflection
    you.
    Needed
    is
    the lesson
    that needs
    to be
    taught.
    Is
    the love
    that can be shared
    but can't
    be bought.
    Is
    the water
    in which
    you drink
    to live.
    Is
    forgiveness
    something you
    don't keep
    you give.
    Needed
    is
    the hope
    Or the faith
    in God
    above.
    Wanted
    is
    a smile
    Or a piece
    of
    your love.




    Submitted on 2005-10-13 20:49:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      how come instanted of putting Needed a much of times you put Something like this

    Needed...

    ...is
    ...is
    ...is
    ...is

    Something that. That would be cool LOL Just an idea.
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by kaoriliveshere | [ Reply to This ]
      Wowz! I like this one too. O yea I forgot to say this in my last comment I left you on your last post you wrote "unritled" instead of "untitled". And I couldn't think of any ideas for a title for that one so I just thought I'd let you know. Anywho...you said a good amount of stuff in here. All of it is what I agree with. This was a different way of writing for you but I really liked it. When I try writing a different way it never turns out really well so I always write the same way incase you haven't noticed. But yes there are always going to be certain needs in life and you wrote about some good ones. *still thinking of a plan*...lol...Anyways nicely done. .

    Brenna (I felt like writing my name this time)
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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