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    dots Submission Name: First Lightdots

    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Good morning

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    dotsFirst Lightdots

    First light gently wakens the splendor
    of the sleepy mountain peaks as an
    inviting breakfast treat.

    It is syrup on a pile of pancakes
    slowly slipping down the slope
    until it is puddled at my feetů so sweet.

    I accept beauty as it finds me.
    My eyes opened to magnificence
    as your breath caresses me.

    Submitted on 2005-10-14 06:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a lovely poem. And not to mention that I got to read this one in the morning! Makes it all the better. This is nicely written and expressed and captures the beauty of the morning in so many ways. The second stanza is really good and I like how you have carried the mountains over into it as the syrup slips down the slope...and then puddles at your feet. This is a wonderful poem and has indeed brightened my morning. Lovely. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      a beatiful poem to read first thing in the morning

    I used to be the kind of person who could sleep all day
    Now I wake up at 7am and look forward to a new day by begining it with writing

    Thanks for your recent comments

    Know your words motivate me to wanting to write more

    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cool, to use the mountains as a place where light gathers, because it is an image we all can relate to. The misty dreaminess of love coupled with drippy pancakes? What could be better, I like the conciseness of this one too.

    I hope your next love spills down the mountain soon..

    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh.. i had a wonderful sigh after reading this Chrys.. so sensual and light. the sweet breath of your lover that awakens you to joy and beauty. having recently been with my love, this was a taste treat of memories for me.. *sigh*

    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      A very lovely prayer to nature and your lover. I have watched to sun spill over the mountains a few times myself and it truly is a wonderful experience I always recall. This is beautifully written and was a pleasure to read this early morning, Dan
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]

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