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    dots Submission Name: Mountains And Leavesdots
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    Author: dmm
    ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 741/888/102
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Reincarnation is such a wonderful and mysterious thing.


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    dotsMountains And Leavesdots
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    Nothing disappears although
    it is transformed.
    Refashioned into something new
    from that which has been worn.
    Evaporation, degeneration, erosion
    and such,
    Take what has been used and renews,
    thank you much!
    We cannot deny that all that dies
    is reborn,
    Perhaps not the same but in a
    different form.
    As for ourselves we believe we
    disappear.
    Ashes to ashes it causes us great
    fear.
    We fret and we fight against that
    which awaits,
    Thinking that 'our' lives are the ones
    that abate.
    It seems a great err to embrace
    this belief,
    Standing apart from the mountains
    or a leaf,
    Creations nature is to continue in
    it's way,
    Each eve the sun sets, each morn
    a new day.
    Give in to the truth that sings on
    the wind,
    For each death in this life a new
    shall begin...





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      A very interesting take on how you view death, you did a wonderful job as always with the imagery, rhythm and rhyme. Your flow was also very good.

    Death is considered one of the great mysterys of life, I believe it was hindus who first came up the whole idea of reincarnation and it was adopted by others though I not a 100% sure so don't quote me on that. People fear death because people fear what they don't know or just can't understand, simple human nature.

    This was a very good and thought provoking write. Keep up the good work and have a blessed and wonderful day.
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Dan! I really connected with this piece today - one of those fun divine coinkidinks!
    Nature is our living example of how "IT" works - & this piece poetically affirms that. Jesus talked a lot about "death" and how "IT" is overcome. I feel a tremendous spiritual connection with nature and that bond has strengthened my love and joy.
    If you believe as piece illuminates all your experiences are adventures and eternal.
    Great!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I will walk through the woods nearby my home, thinking of these words now. This was a poem that made you think and I loved the simple way you expressed rebirth. Truly a joy to read.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very deep and so true
    Thank You Thank You Dan for writing about this topic
    You really nailed it with this write
    God Bless You My Friend
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that was such a cool poem. the ending was fantastic and I couldn't agree more. endings just open doors for new beginnings, as death prepares room for new birth. lovely poem Dan and very uplifting thoughts.
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with you Dan. There is something after death. Whether we be a tree, a dog or whatever, there is afterlife. You've written this with a lot of feeling and created an unusual, enjoyable read.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Dan this one has a great message within! I think you have done a great job writing this one. You make your references to how all things have a purpose, an existance, even after it has died. Death is something that has always scared me. I guess it is because it is something unknown. You cant know what it is or what happens until you have died. And it has always freaked me out that the dead are so cold to touch. But this poem helps you to wonder that maybe its not so bad after death. Maybe you're on to something here hee hee! And I like your perspective on this issue much more than my own! But anyway, I like this poem. It is very nicely written and sheds a little optimism on a very dark and scary subject. Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I was just rambling on about life and such. how we all fear the here after not exsisting. how the life span of humanity may not even be a blip when compared to that of the universe.
    how my vanity makes me want to belive that us humans have a perpous (a part to play)in it all. how it is true that life rises from the dead. and how i wish I could watch it all unfold.
    I conluded by saying that your work made me think. it is not perfectly written and I belive it can be made better but I like what is says. and maybe it should stay as it is maybe this poem is what it should be. not great but has a messge that makes you think on that which is.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by slybee22 | [ Reply to This ]


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