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    dots Submission Name: Here We Bedots
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    Author: Tissue
    ASL Info:    17/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 80/87/33
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       Written two months ago, with obvious religious overtones.


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    dotsHere We Bedots
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    Here we be, trapped in a setting Atlantis,
    Of metal, wood, fire, and sand.
    No stone left untrod.
    God?

    Here we be, shaken in a sinful, weighted tumbler.
    Struck by Hate’s embittered hand.
    Broken at his nod.
    God?

    Here we be, ravaged by our own bright blindness,
    Cursed by our deafening band.
    By self-made sod.
    God?

    Here we be, freed from life’s fatal roulette,
    Saved by his Compassion-Hand,
    Mended at his nod.
    God.




    Submitted on 2005-10-14 10:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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