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    dots Submission Name: The Magic of Two (challenge)dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
    Total Views: 1021
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    Description:
       A challenge I read on Intricate1's page. Use The Magic of Two in the title and piece.

    Happy Friday and joyous weekend!

    Off to Tahoe where I will be showcasing The Magic of Two!! Live,Love,Laugh!!!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif


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    Divine inherent
    The Magic of Two reveals
    me inside of you




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      you broke one of the main rules of writing haiku's, which is to paint some sort of image, usually having to do with nature. Good issue though, but do it in another form and expand on it. Haiku's are not this.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely haiku. Speaks to me of your spiritual quality, found deep within yourself. As when one peers within the deepest self, the id, you find more than one characteristic that is all inclusively belonging to only you, making you unique, and uncommon. This is certainly a magical wonder having this ability to look within. Unfortunately many people are unable to do this, which stunts their growth. I did not find this so with this wonderful haiku poem. This is definitely original, and speaks loudly within the quietly written word.
    Blessed you are, my friend, may
    God bless,
    Yvonne
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by dycrain | [ Reply to This ]
      I read a bunch from this challenge and this one is very lovely. I believe it is the only haiku from this particular challenge and it is very nicely done. You have captured the essence of the magic of two in all of 11 words. I like how you chose to describe this. Very nice job! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this T and once wrote a poem that our own identity is safe inside that of the Divine, there is no worry of losing ourselves. After all we were designed to appear over time, all of us in different scenarios with various talents.

    I'm impressed, but the more I read you, the more narcissitic I feel (honestly!) our views are so much alike.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful... I really like this one. I like your way of seeing two as something deep like "me inside of you", and how you didn't really speak of duality, which is what most people associate with 2. Your two gave a feeling of oneness, and of the meaning of love. I enjoyed this, hope you keep writing haiku... take care, sb
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      Moooost excellent... So it can stay in context, I will respond to your challenge here in the 3-5-3 english style.

    The Magic of Two

    Hearts beating,
    The Magic of Two
    becomes One

    I'll be in tahoe this weekend too :) Rockclimbing in fact.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by aghori | [ Reply to This ]
      Love IS magic... and can be shared, given, taken, in so many wonderful ways.
    I enjoyed your addition to the challenge

    [ according to stormyskies the poem and title has to include "the magic" - I included "of two"... hers is "the magic of you...which is a nice poem too"].

    Glad you joined in.. this is a lovely haiku.. as is the author.

    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it a lot, it has a lot of feeling and emotion in it, it's rather peaceful. I hope you can have fun with this later...

    Hopefully,
    Darin
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      even though this was jst a hi ku i liked it in little words you were able to describe so mush. good write and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by master mind | [ Reply to This ]
      Eleven little words with a mass of meaning behind each one. Put them all together as you have done and the meaning is eleven-fold. Well done, another insightful write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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